..::Wondering Mind::..
 

:Verse 1:

A cold, dark night spent alone//
Sittin in a pitch black room, no light enters my home//
Crazy, sycotic thoughts, I scratch my head//
Rememberence of Love, pain and blood shed//
Still stuck with the never ending questions I grew to live with//
Still so drunk, seeing only darkness of life, I light the splif//
My mind womders, still un-easy, i try to maintane//
My life filled with much pain, I go against the grain//
Still the questions so desperate I am to answer, I feel flour'n//
Befriend life or love....im tourn//
For not make'n up my mind I get scorned....//
And through all the pain braught I mourn//
....Fear enters the mind like a new born//
My mind wonders, its never in the right place//
My eyes open...my visions a blurr...filled with a burn like my face was sprayed with mace//
And still I look for scriptures so set my mind at ease like beauty depicted in pictures//
My heart aches for love...its used to pain like it was covered in blisters//
........Sensitive to touch//
Sometimes its like the pain becomes a rush//
And yet I find myself backed up into a corner, stuck with no where to go, I stay still//
Close my eyes, pictures of warriors, dead G.I's and blood shreds my mind//
And yet I feel blind but in my mind I still feel as if theirs something I need to find//
Could it be my inner self, God my greater wealth//
I feel so lost, my head i toss from side to side, so lost//
Wonderin the answer, my life could it be the cost??//
My ears then open, to a sound that speaks words cultivate'n like a potion//
Im over take'n//
Is this my calling or am I mistake'n??//
A blue and white light shines down upon me//
My fear is all gone, replaced with a strange energy//
My eyes open, still feal the calmness so surrene//
Still can feel the warmth of the blue and white light beam//
I understand even though I still cant believe what i seen//
Was it the truth or is my mind still wondering???


:Verse 2:

I wipe my eyes, still blind, un-sure of my mind//
Back to reality-it must be the weeds potency-that leaves me on the grind//
I still sit, in the dark, my henney I take a sip//
Calmed down, once again I feel my mind start to slip//
Emotions now arise from my demise//
A field of dead corpses all looking at me with wide eyes//
Bloody fields run like as if it was part of a stream//
My eyes closed, this cant be the truth that I seen//
Once again my minds filled with fear-I stire-myself back into the corner....I stay still//
The room in my head starts spinning, filled with fire//
Visions of the Devil, I fear-to-stay-clear-of his words, he's a liar//
I cup my hands over my ears//
Loud chears in the background fill the air, my eyes open only to see myself in a billion mirrors//
Confused the voice returns, I turn in every direction tryin to find its source//
I turn right-I feal fright-I stare into the face of a dead manz corpse//
I wake up, my hearts pumpin a million miles per hour, I through the splif//
Back to reality and all I see is a room filled with darkness//
Still left with the questions im still pondering//
Was it the truth...or is my mind still wondering????

uppin this for some feedback...holla

Damn, uppin this AGAIN for some feedback.....shit is gettin hella slept on hahaha....1

*zZzZzZz....damn wake the fuk up yall!!! lemmie get some feedback PLEASE!!! HAHAHA 1

all and all nice verse, ur vocab wasnt too bad, perhaps u need to work on the complexity of ur metaphors, but all and all touchen rhyme, could tell it was from the heart.... keep commin with ur shit dawg.

Respect.

pz

^^^ werd....thanx alot for the feedback playa, its much appreciated! uppin for some more feedback, 1

nice

^^^ haha thanx for the feedback....shrt and sweet, im feelin that

uppin for some more feedback,1

liked the fact that you kept to a subject...but thought the structure wasn't really workin, and it all seemed a bit basic, but it looks like you put thought into it....so keep spittin.......peace......