Why Me??????
 

have you ever loved a girl and thought that she loved you just as much??????
have you ever kissed a girl that could take away ya pain with just a touch??????
have you ever thought that you would stay with her forever if you were givin' the chance??????
and then one night found out...that she was fuckin' kissin' ya man!!!!!!
I'm not a jealous man...so instead of being pissed I'm wishin' him luck...
but I have a feeling that love will turn to violence when this relationship turns from a kiss to a fuck...
I'm about to be givin' it up...because I'm gettin' tired of life...
tired of strife...sometimez I feel like pluckin' out my eye with a knife...
I got a dead end job...bussin' tablez while the other employeez are pissin' on me...
I go to work like I ain't got enough problemz at home when my own fam is dissin' on me...
"Tomas...you're just a deadbeat High school drop out with no class"...
I wanna go back to sellin' weed cause bussing tablez for 5 months has got me no cash...
I remember back in the day...I used to have respect in Brooklyn...now...
I'm in Florida...as a busboy while the other employeez talk to me while lookin' down...
sometimez I feel as if I'm shit outta luck like cancer patients...
I can't get a girl...how I look as a 19 year old nigga usin' a buspass as transportation...
if you ask me how I been...I'ma say "chillin'' although shit isn't good...
all these little rich white kidz I work with just look at me as some stupid kid from the hood...
I got myself a job...with a girl that's goin' be fuckin' my friend...
every time I try to do somethin' good I end up gettin' fucked in the end...

nice drop, flow was good, vocab was pretty good, content good, multies good...was feeling what ya was saying...nice drop...had good emotion...keep dropping

sometimez I feel as if I'm shit outta luck like cancer patients...
I can't get a girl...how I look as a 19 year old nigga usin' a buspass as transportation...

stood out to me ^

I got myself a job...with a girl that's goin' be fuckin' my friend...
every time I try to do somethin' good I end up gettin' fucked in the end...

^...really summed up your whole drop, nice way to end it...

yo if you get a chance, check out my latest open mic, i could use some more feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=83967

very graphic poetic and real.....
im sorry things happen like this bro!!!!!!!!
you got fam here if you need......
i liked this alot it shows a more indepth concience in yu

Ill shit man, nice multies, lots of emotion and you stuck to the

subject, if this was real shit then you show you mean it,

PROPS KOT

^^^lol...of course it's real shit...unless it was topic that was in a collab where the other cat gave me the subject...about 99% of the shit I say in openmics is real...and Brova Steve...how you get that soundclick thing in ya sig??????

A message, i can relate to

Nice read,...nice vocab,..only try to structure a bit more,..

That makes it, ..even more better to read

This was a nice drop man,...

Can u hit up^ Judgements^

^^^yeah...I tried to structure it...as you can see...for the most part...but a coupla lines were just way too long to try to fuck with...lol...I'd have to split the line up into 2 linez to make it even...and then I don't think that would look right either...lol...and Ed...it's 7 in da morning here...so I'ma get to bed...but PM me so I don't forget to hit up ya verse when I wake up...holla

Try usin less words, and make the whole thing still with the same meanin, ...its possible

U got potential, ...pm me if u down to do a collab k?.

Pz.

^^:D

a very poetic piece here man, not my kind of topics but it was a cool drop tho

keep doin ya thang man

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peep ma open mic
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^^^thanks...still uppin'

nice

thanks...but try to make ya repiez more than one word...or even one line...if a mod seez it they won't hesitate to ban you...

nice flow this is the first i have seen of u but it was great

^^^thanks...