~~My DreAm~~
 

back in tha days it was diff-e-rent, innocence was what we had, no guns, no sex, no bags//

no difference if we were labeled wit tags, fabeled to be sad, but we cradle our schwag//

but back then we didnt toke weed, we had no need-cuz, our imagination pleased-us//

we had plastic guns and a swing-set, in the apartments back when we didnt bling-yet//

as if we even bling now, but i bling in tha rhymes that i shout, always turnin up tha beats too loud//

back then we listened to da dip and tag-team, in tha car wit our moms for we even had-green//

as if we even have green, some of us have jobs and stay mad-clean, but tha rest of us wish we had-dreams//

dreams are made through visions of your self in action, at night i see my self in dreams rappin, seems that things-happen.

I'm feelin' that


nice talkin' about back in the days mayn

keep it commin'

peeps dont sleep!

very nice piece, simple and to the point, content flowed well.
structure was decent. You didnt go off subject and it was short
but you came strong with your point. you also left it at the end
where it could also be added to. Keep writing.

was very simple for me to understand and to the point. flowed well and was structured well. keep droppin

thanks for tha replies,uppin^^^

I liked this one, it sparks nostalgia which is the sweetest sin i know, it was deep and let each reader take from it what they pleased, really good, 1luv.

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great piece, good word usage amd creativity, flow was good and all in all great poem...can ya peep myn

"Faith"---thanks, peace

hey nice drop, i was really feeling it, lifes like that innit? some days you just wish you could go back to being small again, to the times when you had no worries and everyone got along, no drugs, no hate, no police. Back when life hadn't hit you yet. Its shit man, i think that all the time, you hit teenage years and life just blows up in front of your face, my generation have a lot to deal with these days...sorry for going on but i'm sure someone can relate...and this poem did exactly what i think it was supposed to do, it got me remembering good times, before i grew up and got the weight of the world on my shoulders. Keep postin man, i like your style.

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yea that was tha main theme of this story was so those that relate can reply and remisce on back in tha days.thanks for peepin this piece,uppin.~1~

this was a kick back reminesse peice. feelin the flow ya had going, it really did make the peice a easy read. stay up wit this

peAce

uppin this one last time.~1~