ITT: I need a favour
 

i'm lost in a path where agony lies..
as every moment collapses and passes me by..

tradegy smiles behind my glimmer of hope
that's extinguished by death's blizzard of snow
my mind is frozen amidst winter's screams
as my soul is left cold, numb, and shivering
then the sun flickers and my carcass is burnt
so i start to "search for answers"..
that are lost in a heart with no words

as the years pass, my beer glass falls on deaf ears
while i'm stumped gullible, wondering how did I get here
i been fucked multiple times; never free from tension
no matter how precise my perception, i can't see the exit
but i need a sentence, to explain my departed dreams
as i hide in a hollow and the bark starts to scream
the branches break and then the leaves wither and die
while the trunk turns to ice to show winter's arrived
the winds howl rapidly, and comes bitter and cold
as the cradle in the tree top falls to the dead litter below
and the child? that baby in the cradle broke his neck..
..from the fall, now it's in a world known for death

it won't stop, while facing the strangest day
but i just want each correlation to say my name
the man's moment is taken as the tramp holds it
while the pain rains down in a damp coldness
my face in the rubble, i'm mistaken for trouble
but i'm just another tear in the face of the puddle

i'm looking for questions
with raw desires
but i'm refusing to mention
that god's a liar
yet i've gone so far down
that i'm under hell
my soul's dead but my heart pounds
in another realm
nothing's ever gone my way
that's the fucked truth
and no one's ever stopped to say
"Son, I love you"
i'm going to be isolated forever
in this building
so god, make my life better
and please kill me


is that too much to ask?

that peice was real descriptive and lots of meta's I enjoyed reading it...

it was a real good read and you got potential to do alot

dope shit

Yes Camarac, you were right about my alias.

bare knuckles, now knowin its u ima say its still was good, the imagery was good, the vocab and wordplay were nice, and the content and topic were both original, good post dude, keep droppin, i was feelin that.

peace.....

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that was tight keep that shit comin

that was mad phat
keep em comin
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this shit was hot dog
you used multis
structure
flow
good

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shit was dope, lines dropped were dope, vocab was dope, structure was dope
dog I guess what i'm saying was this was dope



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