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...::Mind Over Matter::...
Are you still stuck on the meaning of the title entitles?
Its the method of momentum for your rifle too cycle.. Matter=Objects Objectes=Objectives Objectives=Mind Mind ------------ = Power Objective Separations of equations are vital for them to be appliable Liable to not be admirable and have implications in creation If we're def to what manifests then its detrimental potential Intentional conventional progress leaves hope compressed Express Impress with science being perpetual exceptional Whats Correctable? Only the scale of the tactical process Mathematical Contest!! That’s how you concoct delectable Now comprehend how to defend from all the threats set Except your debts from when you mended all the trends Power seized with ease?! Do anything to ensure you win Destined sins are the price you payed to feed your creed ..Next up Kids.. To command work to be adapted to the scientific foundation Demands lurched protract within raps with terrific relations Exquisite innovations is the objective to completely dominate Revisit complications to have subjective credibility designate To destruction.. Rid Corruption.. With conduction.. Without reduction.. That Is all class, You may now once again be dismissed With full math, With also the know how on how to exist |
NICE NICE NICE PIECE.
Wow, This One Amazed Me, Nice Style, And Alot Of Different Terms. Of Course, The Whole Structure Confused Me, And This Goes Down The Middle Of THe Line That Seperates Open Mic ANd Poetry, While Of COurse Displaying your Talents And Shit. Good Drop |
pretty good vocab, flow'd good most places.. again' it's like my old style lacin' a text with multi's of big words, i don't peticularily like this style ne-more, but i's still good dawg...1
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Pretty good here...
Decent topic... Imagry wasnt bad withthe vocab... Pretty good flow... Yep... Good piece... |
that was fuckin tight in my opinion, i was feein ur imagery the most, but the vocab and wordplay fit ur topic well, that was a hella nice post, keep droppin homie, i was definetely feelin that.
yo if u have the time can u hit this battle up wit an honest vote? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=84781 itd be much apprecieated. peace...... |
Ur flow was ill dawg, the complexety inside was amazin, and real new never saw it b4 , .. ...damn
Ur vocab was blazin aswell,...u had a damn hot intro , ...iunno , i think this was a damn good piece....nuttin more to say bout this just a good piece Props |
Thanx.. Up
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This was unique beyond comprehension. The rhyme scheme is one rarely ever found in this type of a piece, & unfortunately wasn't quite pulled off perfectly. It was a good attempt, though!
When writing a hip-hop type of a piece with multiple syllables, it's so hard to pull of a unique rhyme scheme. Mixed with the extent of your vocabulary, your task is only harder. First off, I'd tone down the vocabulary a bit and work on word choice. The only person I've ever seen pull of an absolute "dictionary drop" is N-Demik, & you're not quite on his level (yet). Secondly, make sure that your "bars" are absolutely even - to the syllable count - when using this type of a rhyme scheme. I was definitely impressed with your opening and closing lines. They were succinct and constructed in a perfect manner - try to adapt the whole piece to that sort of a flow and word choice. Still improving :), g'luck. |
Thankyou.. Much appreciated
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i realy felt the intro, and nice vocab, i felt that one, keep'em comin
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I guess you didn't read past the intro.. lol
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i disagree with g.hod i think your format suited perfectly.....i flowed it instead of reading it and found it really amplified what you doit her and i enjoyed it.
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Thanx
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Nice shit here man, vocab, flow was on point
Over nice ass drop....keep it up playa |
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