"the coming"
 

yo! i'm like a spirit at night, a poltergeist hopp'n out of tv's ready to ruin your life
who's ready to fight, who's ready to step in the light
and be exposed for what's to be the truth and a lie
you ready guy, yeah right! that shit won't fly
mutherfuckers start to shoot'n then they ready to die
what type of music you listen to that can get you influenced through it
i bet it's nothin compared to the shit that i be spue'n
the type of music that can get you move'n
when you think that you lose'n
your fuck'n mind all the time
and you're checked into home school'n
brainwashed from all that rap-rock blasted in your ears
till now you just can't enough of love'n your fears
and if death comes, fuck it! you waited for years
who's to say your family'll give a damn if they ain't shedd'n tears
but don't think Jimmy's gone'n into some whole spiritual shit
that a make you sick, and probably vammit some shit you can't stomach
launch'n it out at a million dollar summit, crumble'n it up like it was nothin that you wanted
i'm still srcream'n fuck this shit to the top of my lungs
and i ain't bite'n my tongue for any fagget that comes
start'n beef fuck that! show your teeth
cause when this mag blast it'll take off every piece of your cheek
and i don't smile, that's only when i'm on a killing spree
thought i was free, but i still got the mentality of beast in me
love me or hate me, it's whichever you chose
but just to let you bitches know, i will not lose
i'm like a lit fuse, just let me ignite
this ain't shady records but you betta believe the hype
best believe i'm right, wanna fuck aight
syke, Jimmy boi here doesn't fuck with dikes
mutherfuckers you betta belive i'm real
fuck have'n to much skill i got the will to kill
and when i'm done look'n at the world from the top of this hill
i'm still gonna have this fuck'n lead to peal

not bad at all..alotta dis shit i waz feelin...but w/ me its not only da story 2 tell..but how u tell it...i think u coulda fukked it up alot betat den dis...but dat also depends on u n ur style n level...in short...jus practice...do what u do whiule u can do it~imag

yeah i feel you! thanks

yeah that was an ill drop dawg i was definetally feelin yo shit on dat one well keep postin and keep elevativn( which it could use a little of)

^^werd, this was pretty damn ill, i was feelin ur vocab and wordplay the most probably, ur flow seemed to stay on target for most of the post, and ur content and topic were original in my opinion, keep droppin homie, that was hella ill.

peace......

Yeah this was pretty good...You should try to keep your lines around the same length though...it flowed pretty well through out the piece...Your content was good i thought...add a few more multies and internals...but keep at it...and keep dropping.

just keep your flow steady
keep your vocab and wordplay ill
keep droppin it
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