just another rap?
 

my relaxation tonic, is to smoke the chronic
it makes me bionic,as i get fast like sonic
i smoke a lot of dojja,just like a soldier
but im gettin colder,as im checkin over my shoulder
i know my lyrics make u cry when i say em,time to slay em
never pay em, at breakfast i eat golden graham
ive got a combo, its real long thought
about 56 hits right there on your blond ho

too easys girl took my cock with satisfaction,
as i made her come i saw her knee jurk reaction
i see his mom sellin her bottom often
i wouldnt pay her cause her ass is rotton

okay thats not that good of a rhyme so just take some time to actually think out yo shit dawg theres like no point to this or anything dawg so keep tryin

for a newb that was ok, u need to elevate on ur vocab and wordplay, try and fit in some more multis/metas, ur flow was ok in my opinion, try and even out ur lines even more though, and it will be even tighter, and next time try and pick a topic not so played, u got potential so keep at it.

peace........