where is y'all at
 

yo yo uh

this game is really scrutinizing, bad for ur health
cuz i aint gotta say shit, money speaks for itself
im the sickest ass 14 yr old, been there done em
and if m. jackson came on a lollipop u'd probly suck em
i was flippin the chains, gettin the brains,
cuz my illz got so sick they thought i was insane
they sent me to the clinic, but the meds r workin
the creepers stay lurkin, the hatas stay jerkin
see i've eatin more sushi than a 10 yr chinese
see some so thin they strectch, just call em siamese
been outa this site for so long i've lost dickridin
but some things just dont change, crazypatients biting
but im the original shit, straight out the jungle like an animal
eatin the game up, call me a fuckin cannibal
get the fuck out new-b's, go back to school
cuz all those dicks in ur mouth r causin u to drool
but the vets got all the flow, got all the rep
but they cant say the words when its me, kinda like strep
ur a cheerleada wit pep, but i get paid
but ur hair in a braid and let the football team give u aids
im tired, its only 8 in the mornin, im not ready
cuz the flow of my hand on my dick still isnt steady

hahaha i jus' wrote that to give myself a laugh. watcha all think

yo guyz peep this. tell me watcha think

It Was Aight. And You Ain't The Illest 14 Year Old. Believe That! Work On Everything Because It Wasn't Great.

hmmm...
flow and rhymes were aight
you had a couple off multi's and shit...
your wordplay sucked...
not dope at all
5/10

was okie...keep elqavtin an actually try an think before you put it up may help your script...peep myn word yet unrevealed...and...Made You Vision Blood ...1

that was ok homie, i thought it could have been alot better wit more thought put into it, but its still not bad, try and elevate a little more on ur vocab and wordplay, and try and think of a better topic to write about, u got potential, u just gotta develop ur skills.

peace.......

yeah^^it was okay dawg but the vocab could use some elvatin and shit... the flow was okay but keep postin