Rewind
 

everything i do is like a rewind while leavin off what i left behind~
so i rewind the rewind to fastforward to future~
seeing what it would look like with me there~
what would it look like without me here~
wonderin what i will turn into or what i would look like~
the same old shit or somethin unimanigable like takin a hike~

stop... pause.... freeze.... lets rewind this shit~

I came from one boy to a teenage man~
doing everything that i can that will beat any bitches lifespan~
i have the tendency of using explicit lyrics what you see on your screen~
When you read my rhymes you notice the rhyme scheme~
tryin to achieve a dream that i believe i will receive~
capturin what i want that appears in my sight~
start the light that i ignite despite what you see aint right~
turnin these rhymes into something no one has ever seen~
it is like its one of my own genes~
you think im just lettin down and givin up~
im just gettin in town just livin it up~
showin all these motherfuckin bastards what i am made of~
what you did to me i give you a little taste of~
medicine that you have done to me that i punch lights out like blackin out new york city~
its like i gave you diseeases that give you viruses that effect your own body~
shot all these bitches up and rewind to replay the whole story~

i want feedback please

pretty dope shit, don't know if u meant for it to be understandable if u read it backwards, but if u did that shit is tight, u had ok vocabulary, flow was good and horrible at some parts, nice rhymescheme it shows ur a deep thinker and i also wonder some of the shit u mention



overall i think it was pretty good man, shoulda been on moreover the poetry side, but i guess u posted it here guess poetry doesn't get much recognition

Rating:
9/10

^^^straght wordness holmes......i was feelin a poetry vibe, but its still kool....i do agree wit him though^^, ur vocab was very inconsistent, so ima suggest next time try and work on that a little more, ur vocab and wordplay was pretty good, and ur content and topic was original, pretty good drop homie, keep postin.

peace.......

^^werd ur vocab was but hey just keep elevatin and postin and u will start to become better (elevate )so yeah peace out