Evolutions Conclusion
 

this is different than my usuall style...and its just a rough draft...

This life is a warzone I journey through every passage
political massive government speak for the masses
with rancid language these punks are made outa plastic
dolls so drastik robotic newscasters play the fascists
now how we as humans are capable of so much corruption
life consumption leaked for every word in its own destruction
a fake function the president plays with a u.s seduction
a lunch bin full of poor folk trapped but strapped for combustion
we wont take it we wont let this madness happen
attackin def to this country cut my ears for rappin
strapped in for evil the rich are left anctuously naggin
our lifes are a bad movie only with the closed caption
iraq gets a new government but with no city to start with
were heartless carvin souls out the administrations carnage
cartilage blown on the screen how are we the new harness
scarless america we love you but we cant keep our promise
a democracy of post modern fools chose to plan our blueprint
translucent ideas gets passed fast to the unholy cupids
shooting arrows of propaganda to the everyday clueless
treated as nuecuence we the population are painted as ruthless
television for the violenty animated souls with no ambition
missions for the new cliche. the public hears.. the industrys never listen

HooK
lay me down to sleep as america drains my lifes illusion
this is what we have built a country with to many conclusions
a destruction of the population with home made atomic fusions
the monkeys created it now were here to kill the evolution..

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Good topic
Good Flow
Excellent Vocab
Tiny Font.. I gotz bad eyes had to go straight up to the moniter to read :)
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a lunch bin full of poor folk trapped but strapped for combustion"

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hey fo real the vocab was awesome and the topic was hella good so yeah the flowed kicked ass to so on that not keep postin i like ur shit dawg

what you dropped was killer. nice topic as well. I read it through and through, didn't really get boring, ended off with a nice hook




the reaper

thanx for the feedback...uppin

i rate dis a 7/10 nice keep ya head up