Fucc Hip Hop Remix Please Read!!!!!!!
 

HOOK: (SUNG)
I used to lover her but the music abandoned me.
And I still need her but I cant afford the money
Now I miss her but everyone is killing she
But I’ll always love her you’ll stay in my memories.
The art M.C. rest in peace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
B-BOYS reat in peace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DJs” reast in peace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

How did Hip-hop and rap go from being engaged-
To being enraged?
If I listed the rappers that copy rappers on stage-
there be more names then there are lame lines on their lyric page.
R&b commited adultery with B~BOP-
now there’s this bastard thing called (pop.)
The father of illigitiment suburben kids who g0t-
they chance to roc-The block and not get shot.
what's HIP HOPS’ zip code?,,, a state of emergency-
The mergency of wack and plat is at urgency.
We used to have fans scream “YOU THE MAN” from overseas-
Now we got a bunch R.KELLYS’ and NELLY wanna be's.
maken currency_ off of YOUNG teens ovaries.
That’s why I question every rappers sexuality-
perform TRANSEXUAL surgery if they try an battle me.
Yall some bitch m.c.’s DOING THIS FOR A SALARY.
This was poetry sopposed to be posed and expressed free-
but now subjected to commercial SLAVERY.
The CHAIN of events is obviece you lack creativity-
BOUND to conform to the MAJORITY of the popularity.
Some things are exactly what they seam-
Like how you live your m.c. fantacies only in dreams.

Be careful what you ask for or you might get what seek-
You must bust once every 7 days cause you cumen week.

Either a fake remake or a just a dumb fuck-
Who COPIES KURTIS~BLOW cause you just SUCK!
The game went from ADIDAS to MISSDAMEANERS-
The struggle became a hustle now the game is aboute cheeba-
Hoes getting low and 20’s on BEAMERS?
All that MATERIAL don’t POSSESS SUBJECT MATTER?
Man you Just sell out to sale out and subtract-
phat to make pockets fatter.

HOOK:
I used to lover her but the music abandoned me.
And I still need her but I cant afford the money
Now I miss her but everyone is killing she
But I’ll always love her you’ll stay in my memories.
The art M.C. rest in peace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
B-BOYS reat in peace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DJs” reast in peace!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

THE ORIGINAL
hook:
After I beat every m.c. who steps to my right-
Defeat every rapper till nothings left but a caffeine hype…….

If you an m.c……..b-boy………, breaker………, graffer or a dj-
they’s love but if you a fake thug then give me a BJ.
Damn right my reference is im cocky, son of bitch-
You mad cause you try and cock me, but my sex preference wont switch.

verse 1
For every thousand m.c.’s that came and put in work..i leave 500 sleign the other 500 murked-
For Claimen they hard with bars and got that ass touched like a cavaty search.
For every line you made there’s 50 you kill claimen you ill…
but foreal played-
You couldn’t come off the top if you were getting a fade.
I aint in this for the buissness , I flame raps then extinguished rappers finished.
Extra crispy…. Blemish your image in a scrimmage .so fuck yall!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You give brains to get A~HEAD and couldn’t even FORWARD a phone call.
And I rep VA like Very Arrogant Verbal Assasin.
While you rep an area code where they call you an asshole and has been.
There’s 2 type of m.c.’s besides me-on the M~.I~.C
Those with ovaries- and those that cram N.U.T’s in they ass cavaties.
That’s whyThe day I get signed im a spit nine and start billing-
My record label for the track and contract killing.
Ive been doing this since before the PONY EXPRESS-
Give me 20 minutes you’ll be impressed….
on how I address lines and deliver text to the world faster then fed~ex.
No Im not arrogant and this aint a complex-
But you say you’re the shit and I agree in a different context.
You like ALCHALICS ANONOMYOUS….when you drop bars-
Your groups congratulates you but nobody knows who you are.
I spar- with hooks and punchlines keep my my focus ample-
Then let rappers sample if we ever battle- grapple your adams apple-
And twist it off like the cap of a Snapple.
Fuck hip hop!!!!!! this commercial bling shit got me anoid-
I stay fresh dressed rocken sean john but hate reject labels so fuck BAD BOY.
Fuck any cat that forgot what this is aboute-
So if you soft and say your hard hitten im knocking you the fuck out.
36 times one for each tooth in your mouth-
AND GIVE YOU A ROOT CANAL THE SIZE OF 95 NORTH AND SOUTH.

hook:After I beat every m.c. who steps to my right-
Defeat every rapper till nothings left but a caffeine hype…….

If you an m.c……..b-boy………, breaker………, graffer …… dj-
they’s love but if you a fake thug then give me a BJ.
Damn right my reference is im cocky son of bitch-
You mad cause you try and cock me but my sex preference wont switch.


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ain't i not seen your spits before....will look at them from now on tho...you defo a vet, cos i seen the rhyme scheme and flow that you seem to hav made yours, its creative and original and works,

if i a being negative, the vocabularly is not too complex or techincal, but to be fair you hit the topic with the vocab and wordplay you choose:

Now we got a bunch R.KELLYS’ and NELLYS’…
maken currency off of these YOUNG ovaries.
That’s why I question every rappers sexuality-
perform TRANSEXUAL surgery if they battle me.

i can't really say much more negative, or positive, i think i wanna see some more of your spits that you do aight....this was for the first spit.....

it was a good solid drop.....just wanna see some more to see what you like in general, not neccesarily on a topic....

peep my drop, it only 14/16 bars

thnlks i mix up my posts from advanced complext word usage to basic i try to attract dif crowds some hate the big word fad and some appreciate colerful vocabs. did you read both cause they mix up complex and basic

aight....i will read the others.....i'm a fan of metaphors/similies, like hidden messages and a mix of complexity and simpliticity, bascially cos "ILLMATIC" my fav albulm....peep mine....i mean its not my best, but i been type stylin for around 9 months now...i'm droppin babies at it hahaha,

You give brains to get A~HEAD and couldn’t even FORWARD a phone call.
And I rep VA like Very Arrogant Verbal Assasin.
While you rep an area code where they call you an asshole and has been.
There’s 2 type of m.c.’s besides me-on the M~.I~.C
Those with ovaries- and those that cram N.U.T’s in they ass cavaties.
That’s whyThe day I get signed im a spit nine and start billing-
My record label for the track and contract killing.


this was the best part, i really like the worplay and flow most of all in your spits,

think it was nt as tight here:

Ive been doing this since before the PONY EXPRESS-
Give me 20 minutes you’ll be impressed….
on how I address lines and deliver text to the world faster then fed~ex.
No Im not arrogant and this aint a complex-
But you say you’re the shit and I agree in a different context

it had a message....but i just did nt feel it as much as the first quote....

this is also tight..

I spar- with hooks and punchlines keep my my focus ample-
Then let rappers sample if we ever battle- grapple your adams apple-
And twist it off like the cap of a Snapple.
Fuck hip hop!!!!!! this commercial bling shit got me anoid-
I stay fresh dressed rocken sean john but hate reject labels so fuck BAD BOY.


i think if you drop at a maintained and consistent level throughout one verse....you shit will be a very high and unique standard....

aight....yo word if you got msn....hit me with your hotmail address...i wanna hear how i can elevate in ur eyes....i get told on different boards different things....like its hot or it needs work or its dope etc...

pop i drop every day on here and i mean every day you can go to almost andy page and see 1 to 3 of mine on...lol i felt it was consistent...relay a message in a smother of punchlines it isnt that easy .
also the second post is the original if you read that you see the punchline version i di a remix to have more meaning to topic read the first reply pop lol

i dont have hotmail but hit me on azazeal666@yahoo.com

this was a good drop, good consistent flow and rhymescheme, this the first drop of yours uve seen but ill def be lookin out for more, i think the first one was better but both were tight, good work,


check this out and let me no how i can elivate

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85276

i went for a battle sonf and then tried remix proving that even battle songs have meaning......that was the goal in this.

UPPIN THIS DAMN

yeah nice drop dawg.. the flow was tight keep postin i love readin yo shit dawg.. so post more soon and good vocab

yea deff a nice drop..

ok first lets get to the remix
flow was good, vocab was a lil on the silmple side but it worked...content was good....overall a nice drop...

This was poetry sopposed to be posed and expressed free-
but now subjected to commercial SLAVERY

The game went from ADIDAS to MISSDAMEANERS-
The struggle became a hustle now the game is aboute cheeba

those two stood out to me^

and as for the original, since i slept on it like a pillow, i'll leave some feedback to that too...
flow was nice, vocab was nice, deff had a battle feel to it...it sort of reminded me of copywrite...dope drop...was feeling this a lil more than the remix, maybe its cause i like to hear battle type rhymes more but either way both were nice...

You like ALCHALICS ANONOMYOUS….when you drop bars-
Your groups congratulates you but nobody knows who you are.

illness^

keep dropping yo...

your shit rocks
nice flows and vocab
keep on droppin
ill keep on readin
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