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trueinterlude 10-15-03 12:57 PM

silence
 
Ya like a lamb to the slaughta, sittin, waitin, anticipating/
Me an Hannibal lecter we be collaboratin/
Off comes ya face as I devise ya surmise wit eaze/
A dine on ya organs n contaminate ya veins like infectious disease/
Wots that, speak up, cant make out ya pronunciation/
Aint no inoculation for ya verbal constipation/
Ya spit is shit, halitosis, ill fumigate then annihilate/
Who the fuck ya trying to impersonate/
Ill show you how to punctuate, comer, hyphen, full stop/
This wylie coyote just got dropped im the boulder that landed on top/

just started writin shit, wot y`all thinx???

yog_dogg 10-15-03 01:08 PM

okay i thought this was okay this may be my opinion but this vocab was pretty good but not that good... the flow was okay also but u need some elvatin though

trueinterlude 10-15-03 01:47 PM

Cheers for ya comments,
i trying to elevate.......
....................................check out my next spit an gimme sum feed.
peace!!!!!!!

Menik 10-15-03 04:07 PM

Ok this wasnt too bad...you should try to keep the lines about the same length...and try adding some internals to help support the flow...flow could have been better but it was ok....vocab was alright...try some multies too...but overall it was alright drop....keep at it....and keep dropping.

trueinterlude 10-15-03 04:22 PM

big up for the advice Master C.................
points noted........am trying to elevate..............
..........................peace!!!!!!!!


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