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compatible 10-15-03 11:30 PM

nelly dis
 
when i joined this site a little while back, i was disenfranchised with the state of hip-hop an rap/
i still am an comp plannin' to expose the scam, come through an challenge 'mc's' who think they gots-the-right to jam/
if you wanna call em' 'mc's,' fuckin' nelly fans you enable that pop slut to transform a lyrical-art-form-in-to a fuckin' sham/
i wish i could rewind take away the grands, take the band-aid off his face an replace it wit my hand/
i run rhymes an pop lines, come with the action, comp leave you wonderin' 'where'd he get that caption?'
comp flows fantasic with intergalactic rhyme didactics leaves foes in traction/
the last fool who tried to step to this action left the battle ring w/his vocal cords in-active/
so nelly, there's the facts son, please come to my town an bring your rhymes an blast em,' cuz like comp said, your futures black son/
you gonna end up in the slums while i pimp your mansion...........

jus' a short little piece, i might expand it later an add shit on top an bottom, an maybe a chorus or somethin.' i kinda think it's got potential even if it is just a verse. but tell me what you guys think, should i add to this piece? or just let it be?

AngelicSheShe 10-15-03 11:41 PM

it was actually pretty decent... I normally dont say much keystyles that have slang and shit... but this just fit together.... nice keep opening your mind...

compatible 10-16-03 12:01 AM

thanks for the feedback


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