1st Freestyle(peep plz i can only get betta right?)
 

haha yall wish...


It Mack-Milli,dont act-silly,yall aint rap-really..
reloaded,ran up "in da club" an smacked-fifty...
jabronis gay-an-phony,tryna portray-my-homie..
now they need a "bodyguard" like Dre-an-Obie..
cus when "shit hit the fan",fakers lyrics-blow-away..
when we put shots thru cars,get ya civic-towed-away..
the kid-is-known-ta-play,yall aint vivid-an-ya-showed-it..
got hot shit bout tha streets but aint livin-as-ya-flowed-it..
i e-mail-kids-threats...watch this alpha male-kick-text..
now rapbattles "urine trouble" like ya failed-a-piss-test..
any that say Mack-not-nice,fuck raps-fuck-mics..
we got gatz-got-knifes..to retracts-cops-lives...
steel bats-rock-spines,so who you dudes fear-lesser..
tryin on "cement shoes"..youll start ta feel "pier-pressure"..
who you hear-fresher?...admit it im bangin-wit-verses..
wanna chill wit tha god?..ill leave ya hangin-in-churches..


quik 16 to introduce...so whats really good?

yo that shit was off the chains...there were so many hot lines i cant even begin...metas were really good...thats some serious shit right there...holla

check mine "MC Rated G"

thanx...ill peep that piece a lil lata...

yeah dog mack milli thats whats really good, i can't front keep writing that crack dog matter of fact i want to see you battle somebody and crush them you good dog. keep usin the multis keep it up check out some of my battles in front lines Pacaso vs Pce, and Pacaso vs Rob d

no doubt...

oooooh weeeee! This is the shit I enjoy reading... Fucking Loved your wordplay... lines like these made this really enjoyable...

"now rapbattles "urine trouble" like ya failed-a-piss-test.." Fucking tight wordplay i love on wordplay


"any that say Mack-not-nice,fuck raps-fuck-mics..
we got gatz-got-knifes"
Blunt an Raw, I Love on Raw point blank shit....


"tryin on "cement shoes"..youll start ta feel "pier-pressure".."
Some more Raw shit...

Looking forward to reading some more of ya shit... 1

thanx..i appreciate dat yo...

uppin...

dont sleep...

Dog I was feelin the wordplay, not to many niggaz get down like that, overall, it was tight...
Holla at ya boy..1

This was a pretty dope piece.
Work on your vocab,metties,wordplay and structure.Make it longer.
Overall:6/10
*return the favor on my piece,goodfight goodnight*

that was a nice drop, flow was good, nice use of multies...vocab not bad....content was good...it was a nice overall drop...keep dropping son...looking foward to reading more of ya shit...


steel bats-rock-spines,so who you dudes fear-lesser..
tryin on "cement shoes"..youll start ta feel "pier-pressure"..

that was hot ^

jabronis gay-an-phony,tryna portray-my-homie..
now they need a "bodyguard" like Dre-an-Obie

haha i liked that too...

if you get a chance check out my latest open mic and hit me up with some feedback...
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=85644