Hate from the X
 

Theres so much hate in the world, theres no way to get around it
But it doesnt come to me, i guess i went out and found it
All because i pounded it, now the family hates me
But thats ok cause it wasnt her, it was the family that dates me
Now what awaits me, is a long line of shit talkin
I can't be walkin, down the street without someone gawkin
Lookin, Sayin hey "thats that guy who dumped that girl, He was her world"
"He's such an asshole, how could he do that"
Well i'll tell you how i did it, I brought this girl back to my house
We started talkin, then kissin, then i took off her blouse
We got hot and heavy, for about an hour and a half
Then i picked her up off the bed, and took her to the bath
I wont go into detail, I'll try to keep this g rated
Cause even if i dont say what happened, this whole story will get inflated
And saturated, you always only hear what you picture
You werent like a painting in my life, more like a fixture
We were a mixture, a love hate relationship
Only loved eachother when we were making up from shit
And we only fought, when we thought it wasnt mutual

I was really feeling your ideas, flow and vocab... i think you coulda done a lil better with what you had...

we all have are days... i can tell the skill was definitely there...

keep posting-1

this was just a keyed up quik verse cause i was pissed off and needed to let some steam out... i wrote alot more, jut this is all i posted... thx tho, uppin for more feedback

nice drop Ill....good flow and i like that u never fell off topic, good drop

The flow is nice...Topic isn't original but you showed some individuality with the wordplay. It's a simple piece, you didn't use any metas or multies. Stay active fam, keep dropping. One+

anyone else?

Yeah I think it was a good drop. Only thing I noticed is your rhyme fell short at some parts.

Be sure to return the favor by hitting up my open mic:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86052

^^^^example of the worst fuckin feedback ever

don't fucking complain wehn you break the rules.
one piece per day
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