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Edicius 10-17-03 08:50 PM

SS: Obedient Minds
 
:.Obedient Minds.:
A confused industrial complex,....tryin to maintain a unprecedented hype,
tryin to fit in,fail's so they try harder hidin behind alter ego's of any type.
bein obedient,tryin to protect, them selves from a painfull furter hummiliation,
Cuz in side their head its just a dubious unaccountable destroyed organisation.


:.Maybe its becuz.:
Consequently incorporations of... releasin... pain,
Resultin in a struggle,flowdin,in every single vain.
And its providin,crucial fuel for a symbiotic relation,
or are obedient minds just a victem of their own misinterpretation?.
Hidin behind, statements, of others,why so afraid to express themselves?,
bein obedient,to reactions intstead of lookin inside listenin to their selves.
Cant stand the thing called constructive critism,
indulgin,.... curious obidient minds their cynism.
Seems they are unable to orchastrate,.... plans to avoid the unwanted,
gettin exceptionally tense waitin impatiently on a place were wanted.


:.I Guess.:
That its always gonna stay the way is, ..same as peeps die'in daily from slugs,
Like imaginin a future,where the most valuable currency is not cash,gold,drugs.

Accelerate 10-17-03 08:54 PM

Deep....One Of Your Deepest.
This is one of the pieces which showcase a rare Talent for staying on point with a topic. Your Vocabulary was definately on point and your whole idea made this a great piece. Good SHit Man, I wanna see more of these.

whitelightning 10-17-03 09:07 PM

you are the worst topical writer on this site...edicus..you need to elevate..

LOL

that was some dope shit man..keep droppin this shit...Favourite Line:
Hidin behind, statements, of others,why so afraid to express themselves?,
bein obidient,to reactions intstead of lookin inside listenin to their selves.

Keep Droppin

Dirty Sally 10-17-03 09:13 PM

That was deep...one of the better open mics posted lately. You show good wordplay and vocab. It is well structured and flows nicely. And the topic is original and thats what makes this one stand out from the other open mics. You didn't use multies but it was a very good piece nevertheless...

Now if you'd be so kind hit up my open mic- Asylum Gates/Dear Omens, sadly it is getting slept on.....

Edicius 10-18-03 10:49 AM

Thnx ^^up

rule 10-18-03 01:06 PM

very good read, wordplay was ill, your vocab was off the hook, flowed great, definitly a very deep piece but excellent, well done peace

MP~PHASIZ 10-18-03 02:11 PM

Everything was on point:
-flow
-structure
-vocab
-wordplay

Nice open mic dogg!

Return the favor and hit up my open mic:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86246

Edicius 10-18-03 04:29 PM

Up^^


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