"Life" (keystyle)
 

What up with this, all i hear is people bitch
whining about how there life sucks and shit
suck it up, hard times come and go
like it or not, gotta move on though
forget about the past, that went by so fast
think good thoughts, like when we had a blast
yes...life sometimes it can be hard
it can leave your inner soul scarred
we all go through shit, and it sucks i admit
but it's no reason to get your wrist's slit
you gotta belive that you can achieve
this world i'mma never gonna leave
till the day i die, till that day i say my goodbye's
then i'll be ready to head for that light in da sky
there's no reason to die yet, there's just no point
live your life to the fullest, and don't disapoint
god created life to live...not for you to take away
sooner or later, i'll see y'all in heaven someday
but not anytime soon, i got a lot of livin to do
but until that time comes, i bid you all adieu

uppin for somethin
T4L
Peace!

Erm i aint sure what to say. This peice was more inspirational than anythin. It sort of gives people a boost when their goin through tough times. Not the best peoce but certainly not the worst. Keep at it.


Peace!!!

pretty good, a lot of inspiration, a good piece but i thnik you could have done better, but good wordplay and flow, andnice peicve to read wen ya feel like givin up...keep it up

Try adding some longer lines

It Was Funny! And Good Too

Like red dragon said try makin it longer!

Werd

you mean word right?

Yeah she does

this was a pretty straight forward piece, letting ppl know that your sick of they're whinning, sick of hearing their problems, to just leave you alone. but then you change into someone who cares trying to help them put it behind them pushing them to move on in their life. i agree make it longer, but other then that nice piece

~My love~