World War
 

political turmoil engulfing the globe...rationalized attacks ensuing in jews homes....crystalnaght, ensures no shalom....ghetto confinements keep the dead chilled to the bone.....despotic rulers aspiring for a renewal of Rome....attacked nations not alone Ally together fighting side-by-side....not strong enough better off dead by cyanide...blitzkrieg evil freed crossing the rhine causes european sweat beeds....missiles impact london after belgium forts fall...paratrooper skills they saw german pride rise.....many frenchmen lost their lives lost their rights and freedom nights....America sent generals stars numbered in fives....heroes rose in timely fashion as the reds closed in with ferven passion....normandy had been the first lesson now eagles nest was gettin the pressin...berlin falls half-n-half soviet union experiencin thinnin like skin grafts....marshall plan succeeds world seems pleased east germany lacks provision for needs...europe in silent contension for next fifty years....but chilly conditions started with comi fears the red scare....nuclear bombs and chemical gas discarding tear....fascisms head cutoff political abrasion world war end is still not near....enemies just change germany no longer in the fight...turns out US and Russian had each other in their sites....but enough of reminscing germany's might was leaking....citizens in italy already skinned mussolini...leaving the burning of japan surrender rendered by the emporers hand...another history lesson thought id teach yall to hit the books....enough with the session compressed history for yall free of bucks.....



another freestyle..wrote this while collabin with smoka...not too bad

Damn, you a war nut huh??? You must still be in U.S history huh son hahaha???


Anyways, this was an aiight drop. The topic you choose was pretty tiight, mainly b/c ive never seen a post written bout WW2 here at RB or anywheres else. Your flow kinda fell off at times but it picked up again wich was straiight. Vocab was good, content was really good. A pretty straiight post, not the best but it was good. But i seen it was juss a lil free you wrote so I aiighnt hate'n on yah.....be easy son, 1

yeah this was just a key styled drop...done at the same timei was keyin a collab...wasnt my best by far cuz its really fuckin late here but i like it...nobody writes about history and i thought it would be original....originality is what i crave...

uppin 4 feedback on my free

Hmm,
Well for one thing your structure was off,way off.It was hard to read.
Also work on your vocab and wordplay try some metties too.You had flow&you stayed on topic.
Overall:5/10

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