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Dimez 10-19-03 06:15 PM

Leave Me Alone!
 
Just Venting On My Ex Real Quick GRR LoL


Leave me alone! Stay out of my life
Leave me alone! Before I pull out the kinfe

I don’t ever wanna see you again, you are now a figment of my imagination
All you did was bring bad luck upon me and cause me too much frustration

I’ll delete your messages, won’t answer the phone, and just ignore you
Everything I did was for you its too bad it has 2 End this way ,I use to adore you

You did too much damage and I’m trying to restore everything you busted
Your words are lies, your words are nothing, B*S you don’t deserve to be trusted

I can’t say I hate you but I don’t love you that’s for certain
We put on a show when fighting but its time to close the curtain


I’m sick of fighting, don’t wanna hear your voice
But you wont leave me alone so I’m left with no choice


Leave me alone! Stay out of my life
Leave me alone! Before I pull out the knife

WoRd:Progress 10-19-03 06:20 PM

I’ll delete your messages, won’t answer the phone, and just ignore you
Everything I did was for you its too bad it has 2 End this way ,I use to adore you

I can’t say I hate you but I don’t love you that’s for certain
We put on a show when fighting but its time to close the curtain

^^^^^^fave lines but without seeming rude i think maybe u shud have words the last line of this..... Everything I did was for you its too bad it has 2 End this way ,I use to adore you

but this was nice you got the pure feeling of this and people can easily relate so nice stuff

peace

redragon 10-19-03 06:24 PM

Quote:
I’ll delete your messages, won’t answer the phone, and just ignore you
Everything I did was for you its too bad it has 2 End this way ,I use to adore you

Quote:
You did too much damage and I’m trying to restore everything you busted
Your words are lies, your words are nothing, B*S you don’t deserve to be trusted

^^^^Favorite lines
This was deep,i can tell you put a lot of emotion into this piece.Keep it up.
Overall:8/10
One

Dimez 10-19-03 06:27 PM

Thank u Peoplez!
Yay!

Anymore feedback?

redragon 10-19-03 06:30 PM

Man she hates me:(
*walks out*
Freepost Ended

Dimez 10-19-03 06:37 PM

Jeff Ur Like a Lil Bro This Aint About U Wtf LoL ...

ANYWAYZ back to topic!

redragon12 10-19-03 08:27 PM

It's all love Yana
Your getting slept on.Don't worry happens to me too

Dimez 10-20-03 09:18 AM

Pfft dont ya hate it?

Dimez 10-20-03 05:05 PM

That Sucks How Like No1 Leaves Feedback.. But Oh Well W.e

Dimense 10-20-03 05:17 PM

Nice Emotional Piece.. Felt it Thro Out..The Bars i Liked were already Qouted..I d Leave ya some Feedback But it was Flawless...
Would ya Stab Him>?
Stay Up n Keep Droppin

Dimez 10-20-03 05:23 PM

If Killing Was Not A Sin I Would Stab Him... But Lucky For Him Im A Religious Person

Dimense 10-20-03 05:59 PM

Hah..U in Tha Choir Too?...
If hes in Ott..Whats His Name ?

Dimez 10-20-03 06:24 PM

I Actually Was In The Choir.... Stop Askin 4 Names And Freepostin.. Ur Never Gonna Meet Me

KeMy$t 10-20-03 06:28 PM

that was really really good. your a talented and i like the way you flowed with it. really nice piece

hit this up w/ an honest vote if you could too thanx.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86737

DiverseSyndicate 10-20-03 08:09 PM

real life shit, ill piece, good structure, deeply emotional, good rhyme scheme, kinda short, you couldve elaborated a bit more, and i thought it ended to abruptly, other than that i liked this piece, keep ya head up boo.~1~


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