true feelings
 

all this time's passed.. and ur still talkin shit? why dont u grow the fuck up..and just forget all of it.. so u say im obsessed? ha thats a laugh.. your the one still holdin on... how bout u keep it in the past.. forget my fuckin name... forget everything i do.. you called me a bitch.. well to hell with you too! rot in hell you stupid bastard, and speak my name no more, why dont u go on with ur life.. that's right.. this bitch has roared... your ugly ass girl... ha this is somethin' you'll regret.. im gonna take u for a lil ride.. ready? set?.... go.. you ready ho? for the trip of a lifetime.. this is my time.. to show you what im all about.. im gonna let it all out.. gonna let it show.. how i feel.. im bein real bitch how bout you? you aint got a clue.. i want to fuckin make you blue... in the face.. to give you a lil taste of how i felt.. you're gettin back what you dealt.. never seen this side of me b4.. WELL GET READY WHORE!

Great drop. Sounds like something that I would write to one of my ex b/fs. Structure was good, as well as the rhyme scheme. You let out a lot of anger in this, and you vented it well. This seems to be a message to all of the ppl that can never let go of the past, and never let go of their past relationships. Good drop overall. Keep droppin. lotz a respect.

nice. Being pissed off and mad is well shown. Simply put to the point. structure is fine and the words could have been stepped up a bit. peace

Great piece. Lots of emotion was put into this poem and you sent the message loud and clear. People do have to grow up and move on with life. Your structure is well formed and the rhyme scheme is well thought out. Keep writing. Look forward to reading more from you.

MM

Most definetly emotional. In a very raw 'lemon juice on open cut' like way.

I appreciated the continuity of your piece. You were unrelenting in your 'attack'. And the structure (or lack of...conventional that is..) gave it that almost resounding effect.

The point from which you came was good. Turning the tables in it's most extreme.

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