Topic - Fights
 

yo, you cant rap and i think youll cry when i smash ya teeth in,
u about to find out what happens to people that start beefin,
u couldnt stand up to a midget and could be easily killed witta pillow,
i can battle ya n rattle ya lyrically n leave ya weeping like willows,
leave a man fucked up but u just lucky i dont kill-though,
u dont wanna battle but behind my back u say i should start-steppin,
i can hurt u wit my fist or my intellect cause my lyrics are like a smart-weapon,
any fuckin fool who think they can be more clever-then-me,
become a victom of punches more precise then severin-flea's,
im never-in-need of help or hints n tips from any decent-post,
im not a killer.. but i can leave people fuckin diseaced-n-gross,
get blown away cause i bring wit me the strong-vibes,
flippin scripts wit or hittin you is more boring then long-drives,

Yeah this was a pretty decent piece i thought....it flowed pretty well as i read it...Try adding some more internals to it...your had pretty good multies i thought...structure was good too...your vocab was pretty good...You had good metas in there...overall it was a pretty decent piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you could leave some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86721

thought this was average, some decent wordplay and decent flow, but i thought the puches were a little weak, but overall , not bad.........keep droppin it

yeah my nigga nice drop u had some good lines good wordplay and a lil bet of metas. this was a nice piece. nice finisher. keep droppin playa

holla

To Be Honest... It Wasnt That Good ...

But It Wasnt That Bad....


Keep Elevatin'

Werd

yo

verse by verse

i Tend-Too End-You cause your a Bent-Dude

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