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Turbulance
Everything gets too crazy for me to comprehend
Just when I get straight I'm back off the deep end Life's turbulance makes me solid when it gets shaky I feed off the jet lag cause I get dragged alot lately Ain't no use in screaming amongst all the scheming Everybody wanting cream & flossing and gleaming In the realm of hiphop we sacrificed many martyrs And it's the herbs that pull us down makes it harder And I may be disregarded as another fly in the web I'm no weakmind fool whos brain died in the head Pray my shoulders can take the burden I have shit I'm a loyal soldier to my crew & a creature of habit Trying to weave my way around this net like prison Braced for constant impact of mass head collisions Most cannot take the turbulance they crash and die Fat chance I'll fall off don't be a bitch & ask me why In it for the rocky ride my senses can take the shock So throw more gas on the fire fueled to make it hot... Thats Turbulance |
A NICE READ YOUR TALENT IS DEF ONE OF THE REASONS I LOV3E YOU BABY
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ALL AND ALLL I GREAT POST GRAPHIC AND SYLISH IN WORD USE AND CONTENT.
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^Dont Freepost Gay Shit Like That.
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i thought it flowed alright and liked your use of vocab, but i didn't like the structure much, it just didn't feel it, other than that i thought it was good,...................peace to ya.....
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word looks like a free poster
this drop was iiight structure was good, flow was average, vocab was average, just an average drop (no offense) few fillers in the verse as well, thats what kinda spoiled it 1 Ain't no use in screaming amongst all the scheming Everybody wanting cream & flossing and gleaming ^^ okay lines rhyme scheme was average, nothing too hot 6.8/10 try and elevate more on yer open mics and keep spittin gurl |
thanks for the feedback, though it would be nice if surreal added what he thought of my piece. Uppin for more feedback....
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