its obligatory.....
 

damn i've been busy so i havent been able to drop nothing for bout a week...anyways just another 16 bar drop with no real set topic to it...looking to get some feedback and ish, so peep it and hit me up with some...if you got something you want me to peep, then leave a link and i'll hit you up with some feedback...



its obligatory, to be amazed the way i stay brain storming stories
MonStar stay fucking more tracks than gang bangs and orgies
i'm a nuisance, that stay illusive, teach film appreciation to blind students
every lines ruthless, baffled?, need a hint?, well i stay dropping 'clues'....exclusive
i'm my own only rival, fuck king james, i quote scriptures from my lyrical bible
the fear i strike seeps inside you, and even in death my spirit will pile drive dudes
my thoughts can exhaust the minds of any exaggerating t.v. evangelist
demon swinging a granite fist with enough force to make atoms split
nefarious with the various styles of destroying an emcees dreams
i scheme to infect society and turn everyone that listens, into my fiends
i'm deadly with my art, call me rembrandt with the mic and the pen
in the clash of the titans, i win, so go head let the fighting begin
i'm an atrocity, spitting verbals at high velocity, aint no stopping me
MonStar the monstrosity, beat you to death with a cat just outta curiosity
abandon ship when i damage shit, break it down to you like a sports analyst
amazing even canibus, Star stay eating emcees up just like a sam-a-which (sandwich)
dirty and deceitful, i'm a wild animal trying to live amongst normal people
not shady or royce, but i'm bad and evil, a poltergeist haunting church steeples
i set blaze to tracks, Monstar, nothing but a walking pyromaniac
spitting zany raps, that confuse the mind and put a daze to cats
violent and crazy, i've been dieing since a baby, silent in my killing ways g
stay dirty but i dont dance like patrick swayze, would merk you but i'm too lazy
saying i'm disturbed is putting it nicely, merked my own dog for trying to bite me
so when you my hands are clutched around you tightly, "am i gonna die?", precisely
i'm the only person to get home schooling and still shoot at his classmates
mom and dad, you better duck when the gat spray, shatter your skull like glass plates
in this game of rap, i'm the lion yous the zebra, its funny how fast you run when i see ya
MonStar, a mythical creature, and my words touch the youth more than a horny preacher
grim reaper that welds the pen with great furry, yea we all die, but i'll make sure it comes early
lines hit you with a tremendous furry, i cause you to worry, so who you gonna call?, bill murray...(fuck outta here)
i'm mentally challenged, shrouded with talent, with a wit thats as sharp as talons
werewolf, in full moons i'm howling, Star set to blow up just like the plane with ritchie valens...(boom)



leave me some feedback...thanks....

A LIL OFF BUT A GREAT READ AND FOR THE MOST PART HARD HITTING ESPECIELLY THE OPNENER

yeah thought it made for a good read, but the flow gets lost quite a bit, and the structure changes a few times in it, which also knocks it off a bit, but i liked your use of vocab...so overall quite liked it.....Peace

could you hit this.......
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=86549

This was nice... flow was a bit off in a few spots... but still nice overall...

'i'm my own only rival, fuck king james, i quote scriptures from my lyrical bible
the fear i strike seeps inside you, and even in death my spirit will pile drive dudes'

your best line in this piece...

Yeah this was a nice piece...it was worth the read i thought...it flowed alright got off track at times but it was still good...add a few more internals to help the flow out...Vocab was fine i thought...good way to open it up, i liked that...overall it was a nice piece..keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you could leave some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86787

That was some hot shit. You must read a dictionary when you're on the can, huh? I liked the piece and I noticed the change of flow, but that's good because the same style in a piece makes for a boring read. Good drop.

thanks for all the feedback everyone...yea i noticed the flow got off a few times also after i re-read it earlier...guess thats what happens when you try and write shit when you first wake up and are still tired...o well

uppin for more feedback