lil sentimental
 

accompanied minus the girl of my dream//
ment to be alone in this world or so it seems//
im above average in some, but below in this mean//
my worlds so cold and sareen//
lost the best thing boys, she had my heart//
don't mistake this piece cuz i still will spark//
ive seen the empty plague hit me, as i live in the dark//
still i remain worlds apart//
disconnected from reality, in in up roar//
reminces fly past my like a bird whoe sores//
its a lesson son, learn it the hard way first//
J said it best, boys we need to put that woman first//
i ain't afraid to admit my loss//
i guess just gotta keep my head straight on//
keep movin on'

too short to really criticise, but with what you drop

it was an average piece really but kinda felt cuz its on some deep shit

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not a very lively sublect, but looked like you put thought into it, i thought the flow was ok, but the rhyming scheme was too basic, indroduce more complexity.........peace dawg....