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2099 A.D.
I wake up one morning...take a ride down my block...
try to jack a hovercraft...but the driver'z sidez locked... so I decide to get back in my ship...but what do I find... a hoarde of robotic zombiez commin' up from behind!!!!!! I put the peddle to the metal...going as fast as I can... simultaneously shootin' gamma rays from the gat in my hand... a man eating virus has now caused a plague in my town... a zombie ripped off a bystanderz head as he waved it around... the radio soundz...like the frequency signal was lost... canibal corpsez ate the flesh of whoeverz head they ripped off... I just injected a vaccine so to make sure I stayed dissinfected... I'm all alone in this battle since Big Brother was disconnected... I configured the binary code hidden within my bionicle arm... this is the aftermath from the radiation of a biological bomb... my vehicle is almost out of charge so my arm turnz into a gun as it sprayz... poppin' the zombiez one by one but still continue runnin' away... they looked at me...I looked back in they eyez as they glowed... now these fuckaz are commin' at me from both sidez of the road... zombiez in front of me...so I decided to use whatever charge I had left... and drove straight into the crowd in a final charge to the death... TO BE CONTINUED!!!!!! ^^^keystyle... |
yeah, thought this was a decent read, unusual subject, but liked it, a bit spacey, liked your use of vocab and thought it flowed alright, but thought you lost it in a couple of places, it stayed pretty constant all the way through, some good lines, especially liked your closer..........keep up the good work, its good to read sumthin different.......peace ma dawg
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thanks for the feedback Deva...
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nice finisher on this shit...
your flow was somewhat weak from what I normally read from ya, but it was still tight... vacab was good... and where the fuck do ya come up wit ya topics lol, nice drop dunny, ~Ashy~ |
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Didnt see a prob with the flow, cudda done with some better vocab but spose its a keystyle, these kinda messin rhymes are always good nice break from all the serious shit around, enjoyed readin it, il look out fo mo of ur shit keep droppin |
haha nice drop....flow was pretty good, vocab was nice, structure was good....content was good, stayed on topic the whole time and really made for an interesting read...overall a nice drop...keep dropping son...
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thanks for thelove y'all...uppin'...
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Reply to First love... and i will replace, ..this with my feedback..
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yo this was tyte yo weird topic but still coo `1`
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^^^the topic was supposed to be wierd..lol...it's called creativity...;)...and ED...I'ma hit up ya open mic now...so holla back...
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^^^I can't poll vote...damn aol...
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futuristic shit....I like it...good drop fam
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thanks ma...
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