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Born To Kill 10-22-03 10:12 AM

Peep these mad, meaningful multi's, please...
 
Diseased trees droppin very sick leaves...
Like cheatin cards slippin outta sleeves.
My mind's a forest from which I retrieve...
Visions of memories that make me grieve.
Can't forget the past, there's no reprieve...
I wish I could percieve it was all make believe.
Go back in time, never land the fatal cleave...
Never feel the upheave but I'm not that naive...
I couldn't run from this crime if I ran ta Tel Aviv.
It's my own guilty conscience I'm tryin ta relieve...
By spittin these words in this thread I weave.
I'm just sittin here thinkin and tryin ta concieve...
That evil and I were once thick as thieves.

Edicius 10-22-03 10:31 AM

This was a real nice ...Piece of writin..

U used a real nice and high vocab, combined with a nice flow

A good concept..

Nicely those multi's..

Goos job on that one..

Enjoyable piece,...

Overall a good piece..

I could break down , ..on what u could do better, but its fine the way it is...

Props..

WORD~PERFECT 10-22-03 11:17 AM

tight in general i saw no flaw but im sure you figured as much

Mr.Christensen 10-22-03 11:20 AM

good job sir, the flow was great!!!
multis were definetly mad and pleantiful
topic was 2 clear for me though...

if you would be so kind
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87052

thug princess69 10-22-03 11:42 AM

yo that was sick needs a bit of work but dam

Born To Kill 10-22-03 12:21 PM

Thanks much for the feedback, peeps...

Especially the latina lady, gracing my thread with her first post...

(If I wasn't married, I'd swear I was flirting like an herb!)

Much appreciated, all...

Keep em comin.

Peace

RiC$EE 10-22-03 04:12 PM

i was really feelin the spit....

my style comes hard with multies...

therfore much respect, tite drop

LM 10-22-03 05:02 PM

I love the peice......I like to use multies wherever I can so I was feelin this......good work B2K


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