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~Figure me out~
lets go,
untrue self-glorification is funny, it tickles me pink i don't think i rule the game but i can still murder your ink 182 ways to cut you up, so make sure you dont blink smooth flows like vanilla, cold as ice without the rink but this aint a game like hockey, I might be cocky others lines are sloppy, your rep is small like a horses jockey im a bad boy on the mike, public enemy number one shed light like a candle, so hot I can burn the sun cuz rappin to me is a craze, drop ultraviolent rays ultra quick with the speech, violent in many ways like planets, to me all other rappers revolve spittin rubix cubes, something that you cant solve I just don’t get how these rappers call themselves vets there rhymes are used like the plot-line for the bachelorette you know I drop hot shit, like a man with a healthy bowel flows never foul, perfection for every line and vowel Its poetry in motion – just coastin not even breakin a sweat, but the vets are wetter than the ocean that how much I got um wigglin, knees jiggilin cant concentrate, pen squiggilin while im giggilin like a schoolgirl, cuz I know how much they underestimate I cant be beat like a handless man trying to masterbate and im on fire, like Im the the next busta n’ joe my next joint will be with mya “my rap game is like woah” it always shows that my flow is like woah make sure that yall know that too easy wont slow but jesus Murphy, I don’t know what the hook gon’ be shouldn’t be hard to choose with all the hooks on me cuz my options to kill are limitless, like those nike shox every line I drop is hard like bricks, like jenga I connect the blocks to make everybody who reads it jump out they socks these lines excite so much, the fellas should be wearin jocks cuz ive found the key to the flow, got the game on lock no guns and know glocks, but I still know how to make it rock so spell it out for me “T O O E A S” why? well im still here, and when I battle someone always seems to die |
uppin this, need some feedback
holla |
uppin, feedback please
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You had a lot of big words BUT it didn't come together as well as
it could have... the way it was put together was to simple, for instance... (its to long to pull out all the pieces) you had the big words but put it together with elementary type thinking.... you cant try to rap while trying to do hip hop ( thats what it seems like, not trying to dis). the structure was okay but it ran together too much for me to follow a straight train of thought... I didn't think you went off subject that much it was just a little shaky and many of the sentences could have double meaning. Keep Writing. |
dawg, your shit is too easy!!!
sorry just fuckin round... yeh u really had sum vocab but ur lines didn't nmake sense a couple off times.. try to elevate a lil more peace check out mine: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87496 |
uppin more feedback please, thanks for what ive got so far
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