off the top..tryin somethin
 

I havent tried to rhyme in two years so be gentle..lol



Complex reality just bit the dust, I must travel through
manageries till I can really trust// Lust is old as time itself, it melts
through plastic and burns through wood// We stood unable to
grasp the mishaps, the gaps, the traps we set ourselves// It
helps if you can understand life, the fright the fear unknown//
Shown to us as we grow older, standin shoulder to shoulder
never knowin hunger like a voulcher// But in despair we hold tight,
we try to share, realize the rare, we don't fight// Tonight is the
night we try to live in peace, wether it's mother, brother, or
niece// People of the world hold together, sharin memories of
the past forever// Have a simple reason, never sly or treason,
come as one while we celebrate this season// Meanin.....
We all know wrong from right, at the end of the tunnel the lights
bright// Don't jeopardize the future of the young tykes, just b/c
you have your likes n dislikes//

now that i read it myself after its posted i fell off really badly

it was alright, some lines just seemed to be put in there for padding...but the topic was good...flow was mad choppy, sometimes i had to re-read the lines, which isnt always good...but the lines that you had and flowed were good cuz they were all on point with the topic...just keep getting better in everyway...expand vocabulary and everything...we all need too, me especially...nice work though

holla at one of mine "Figure me out" and "Too easy"

peace

thanx.

i think over all it was a most enjoyable read yeah filler lines seams soft but hey so the fuck what there is no perfect rhyme analyzing your rhyme i thought it was a great read.

yeah i thought this was a decent read, the flow was ok for most, the topic was alright...yeah not a bad drop.........
i would work on your rhymin tho.....peace!

thanx once again...

pretty deep i feel anything that has to do with knowledge and life keep working-"ONE"