Venting Anger
 

I take my strife and write something just a trife-
Swinging punchlines like I was in A fist fight for my life.
Am i tight?
If you asken instead of gaspen for air-
Then you aint graspen me on the mic-So don’t go there?
You like kids on speed…. the type to fallow the hype-
Resite your shit on toilet paper..your… careers flushed…ass~wipe.
Im from a legacy of m.c.s that been doing this since KRS and BDP-
A whole league in it for prestige not for the currency..
Kill weak wanna b’s. when a make a verb out the word… homicidal-
The only break beat your dj seen was the collaspe of vinyl
,your 16 rapswould get ate in 8 tracks-
And wouldnt get play in my ear drum if they were on ear wax.
feel fear when NONCENTZ is near-
you couldn’t get near an unsigned hype if you saved BENZINOS career.
Go ahead and claim raw on nothing but club manglers
That shit gets no reception like plastic clothes hangers.
i make m.c.'s who oppose me chole im a serial strangler-
my attitudes "everyone dies"like a suicidal gang banger.
Battle me for a title… but you nameless son-
Fucken with me you get busted on more then JEANNA JAMISON.
Talking on how you the illest don’t make you look cute-
My words give amphizima to the proof.
AND HIT harder like zima verses absolute.
one of the illest ever leaked right here….im still flowin-im still growin-
You try to ride me to blow~out but instead you BLOW~IN(blowing)
And I don’t do this to hate I do it to strip your self esteam-
Fucking with me is a fantacy …not being ripped only happens in dreams.
Try to predict me to loose..you must be confused….
that wouldn’t happen in your next life-
trying to get what you want by bitchen…
that shit didnt even work for my ex~wife.
This is how I really am so fuck using a gimic-
That only time most of you hear your iller than me is at the free clinic.

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uppin damn

This was decent... not your best by far from what I've read, but still a pretty good drop. You had a few ill punchlines in there. Like...

You like kids on speed…. the type to fallow the hype-
Resite your shit on toilet paper..your… careers flushed…ass~wipe.

That was my favorite of the verse... peace...

This shit was better than your last..ya got mo of a structure n flow is much more solid..still some wack lines..but the majority of this is pretty tight..some funny punchs..reads likka diss..who knos...overall..pretty solid text..flow is good..vocab is average..deserves props cus its tight

Keep Droppin

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^^

thank you yo that meant alot

yo d abyss, nice ball skills buddy...lol...

yo word perfect that shit was ill...i liked the flow almost all the way through but their were a few lines that were choppy...my favorite line was that shit about Jenna Jamison, its been used like crazy but still makes me laugh lol...

Kill weak wanna b’s. when a make a verb out the word… homicidal-
The only break beat your dj seen was the collaspe of vinyl

that ish right there was dope too...overall this was killer...keep it up

holla at mine "Figure me out"

peace

I agree with all, you had a pretty good drop but there was some
shitty lines or some lines that kinda lost me a little that brought it
down, but it is still a good read. I have a lot of favorites in this,
parts that were really funny to me. You had good metaphors and
play on words. Your spelling of some words lost me a little bit too.

*amphizima *Emphysema .... At first I didn't know what you
were talking about then I thought about it... there is other small
ones that fu**ed me up more that this one but I don't want to go
through it all over again, that one just stuck out.


"when a make a verb out the word"

That line got me stuck.

Good structure and I don't believe you went off subject (then
again it was mostly a battle sounding type)

mami its supposed to be read when i make a verb out the word...homicidal...lol they lonked togeather but i see what your saying.thank you and please show me what wack as far as lines

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