short drop..what u think?
 

ur own blood will soak ur clothes...
i aint worried about u commin back cuz u cant smell beef wit a broken nose...
if u aint thumpin or dumpin then stay the hell home...
cuz the only clip on ur hip holds a cell phone...
ur bitch aint stainin the sheets cuz i use the couch...
and if shes on her period im gonna use her mouth...
ill blow bullets past ur sideburns give u permanent blisters...
have u stuttering, talkin in rhymes faster then twista's...
u think bein on top was a problem...
but my bitch could suck my dick with braces and not pop a condom...

no critique or nothin....come on

i think it wuz iyte

this was OK. u need to elevate your vocab. u had a lil bit of wordplay in there but it wasnt much. your rhyme scheme was alright but again it was basic. that will not win u any battles my nigga. try to elevate yo vocab.

holla

thanks for the insight.....uppin

^word^ it wasn't bad but u can elevate a lil more...

aight check mine:
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87496

roflllllll every single line of that was lloyd banks cease who u tryin to pull over?