Under Dogs Rebelion-DONT SLEEP ON IT
 

were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution//
races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution//
solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders//
like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers//
im teachin two to learn four,how to resolve in such a violence//
cuz for one im sick of poor handlin cause,keepin us silent//
what kind of reign makes slayin people some kinda sport to keep em happy//
theyre making slaughter out of babies,theyve barely grown out theyre nappies//
we see theyre armys wearin armoure, asif theyre scared of sudden pain//
courage is lost like zimbabwes farmers, or a trick by david blaine//
theres little action in theyre brains,so sudden thought is our advantage//
were causing hords of severe damage, by using simply designed old tactics//
thoughts of victorious days are frantick,chains dissapear from mental prisons//
one race mixed up makes one great kingdom,instead of sides,like off a prism//
they were the greater of both sidesbut little thought ended their reign//
our easy laws are here to obide that means lifes ride is much lesser lame//
the game of torture has now gone, living today is a time of goodness//
an easy reign is now so long, thanx to a little tribe of hoodlums..!!

damn, that was dope bruv.
you got madd talent. your pretty sick



your complexity its earily similar to ricochet klashnekoff, great opening and it flowed propa sta.



damn, dis pretty dope, your multis is stronger through out the whole peice, i could tell you took your time with this.




nice message to people listening, no frontin bullshit here, this is rap and the flow and multis is raw




i think you came a little weak here, cudda been improved abit, seemed like you added it for the length



nice attack on the ignorant bastards, who's mind are complete butters, and have no intention elevating, nice line der




again, this is a great overall read, your flow came sick, and reminded me of ricochet klasnnekoff's message telling. wah blow you mos def got skill. overall a great read and all. keep uk alive bruv

Thanx man.....

4 real...

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shit was tight go easy on my piece dawg im only a shortie. 14 yrs old seeing this shit. i could rap like u it's just i took this one easily. i could topically crush u ne day. and i aint talkin bout no battle. just comin up wit a topic, and rappin bout it. lil' challenge, lil snack for the dawg come up to the big plate

LMFAO....

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Lmao at that yank tosser. .

Flow was strong in this, nice use of internals, would be dope if you turned it into an audio piece, vocab was pretty good in this, not over-done or anything, stayed onpoint, opener was pretty nicely worded,

^ Liked that quite a lot, pretty funny but true, lol. All in all not a bad piece.

Cam Likes. :)

thanx man...


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il return tha fava

Ayo patna.. shit was dope and on-point. Flow was crisp and made the read easy. Nice multis and vocab, had the vocab there, but didn't over do it like some dudes tend to .


were takin place of many faces,some kind of revolution//
races of resolutions,makes grace mental polution//
solutions of assasinations disgraces many leaders//
like pagons when the bible made changes for its readers//

^^ Dope. Loved the pagons line, caught my attention fosure.

I'ma have an O.M. up lata, Dear Mom and Dad, peep that when it get's up and keep droppin the dopeness bro.

-Formula.

thanx man...
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