I've Lost Faith...
 

Bracket breaker, a Savior symbol, utilization of the Pais soldier/
A Creator's demeanor rests where a Cross bleeder's ice pick met the cold shoulder/
And it shattered, millionth piece scattered to Babel Tower point/
And Disillusionment happily presented his Power Point demolition strategy/
Broken piston tragedy, call me Pillow Face, a single tear restarts the process/
Obliteration of everything adjacent, a boat of two's opened up promise/
The road less taken, I'll let you do your own thing, but I'll be around/
Bolt action backfired, lodged a stick in my eye, and kicked me when I'm down/
Pacifists, hypocrits, peity, literalists, and society can't find the faith man has stashed/
Abandoned a long time ago. Sitting at my right is a punctured heart, far to the left rests the trash/

Love's sword and shield can't defend me from humanity....
So I nail myself for symbolism, and dangle from insanity....

Love's sword and shield can't defend me from humanity....
So I nail myself for symbolism, and dangle from insanity....

interesting short piece
couldnt pick up on some of the sentences and their meanings but i liked the way it was written...kind of abstract
and the hook at the end was a good touch to it

Thanks....upping

i didnt like it :(, it seemed to much like aesop rock to me, im just not into that abstract stuff, so i dont know what i could tell you to make it better,

but your good at what you do, im sure people that like that abstract shit would like this, but i wont try to change your style, ...uh, just do what you do i guess

Yeah it does......even to me sounds like Aesop Rock.......
maybe I'll give it to him and he can put it on his next album......
however.....it was totally unintentional to sound like that......

actually I just wrote this in 30 minutes for a Topical tournament so I was just trying to think of something quick....oh well.....