Topic - Ja Rule Diss
 

haha, this man wack as hell...

yo, how the fuck am i sposed to understand when ya keep-yellin,
claim to be a gangsta and a natural killa but you just a cheep-felon,
i said sup dog and thats cause ya keep barkin-shit,
this a ja rule diss session and im sparkin-it,
beat u up at night even though i cant see you when the darkness-hits,
your a determined bitch, id kill u n not be surprised when ya carcuss-spits,
get lyrically raped... cause when ya battle me ya ''FUCKED",
ya i could beat you.. but ima betta man so lets battle whats up?,
like when 'sluts suck' your "SPIT" "blows" at the same-time,
forever improving my skill while this fake keeps spittin lame-rhymes,
u a skinny nigga, capable to get filed-away,
you might as well be suckin 'cock' cause ya style-is-"gay",

yo id appreciate some feedback...
this was keystyled as in any other battle, cept its directed at Ja...
Let Me Know What Ya Think.
[]Deace

i need feedback,

hey i havent seen this topic in a while......not......

another one jumpin the hate ja-rule band wagon....cus everyone else does......

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i say ur battle verse -v- ja rule was weak......
he would rip u in half.......no offense.....keep postin up...
just be creative....

fuck you carson, im not a fuckin follower i did this because its practice for me,
i said feedback, dont be makin shit up bout me,
and i dont givva fuck if ja rule could rip that or not, its not the fucking point.
the point is i couldnt understand what the fool was saying anyways.
so when people ask for feedback dont be sayin shit that u dont even know a fucking thing about, fucking fagget,

fuckin bandwagon, man ive never even seen this done before, cept in eminem songs n shit. why u so stupid bro?

ok....sorry i'll make sure to only post postitive feedback to u for now on.......

fuckin panzy....don't post if u dont want critique'd

u didnt even critique, just said i did this cause everyone else does,
then said ja rule could rip that, i really dont givva shit.
tell me what u think of the punchlines and wordplay dont tell me some fuckin famous rapper could rip it, shit man.

ok....punches weak
flow choppy
disses...generic...
overall ...played...
originality...none...
vocab...none....

[closed] for freeposting.
don't up so much.
read the rules.