Keystyle...just some practise work..peep
 

Aspects of ways you exspect me to be but i coward your dreams
Everyday war comacoze of snow drops creatin ice life stop n freez
Restricted Underground Lyrical Epic forced into a dreadful horror
Unworthy tretchuruos betrayal of gods creating tears of sorrow
Goin all out today cause who knows whats gunna bring tomorrow
I'm taking wat i can grasp fit in my palms i dun need to borrow
Imagination accumalating power in ways of suns rays bein shot
Preperation of demonstrations giving me practice for my plot
Unstopable and effortful giving me the medication for achievment
Although lifes scandolous i wont quit im the furious testosterone
that aint scared of the desert im independant i can live alone
Clarify my status an put me on the map for the fraction of dust
A mini partical an element for the peridic table of life dat can bust
You all non metals, non re-active can even cum u got no package
The donavin balie of rap comen quicker then a normal status
Realilistic no, but lifes a pot of shit we just mixin the ingrediants
Wit Murderers, thugs an sluts even to the craziest infeints
Evolving into physical reactions cuz we reactive to tolerance
pushin back neva apt to adapt to anothers back its nonguidance
Providance untrue, similer to polen craven mustrd gas to survive
Even though lifes a whirlpool of clownen im'a sit back an ride

uppen for some critiques peace

Flow - Good
Structure - Good
Metaphors - Good

I dunno couldnt see anything really wrong wit this piece... Just work on ya vocab and keep droppin.

Oh and by the way, I live in Ontario to.. So Where u at Playa?

thanks...uppen

u never answered my question ...
Where in Ontario u at ?

oh shit sorry dawg..i live by kitchener..were u at?

damn thats far, Im in Ottawa

yeah i liked it, its similar to my new style, you showed a good use of vocab, the flow was tight and i liked ya multis, nice work, keep it up dawg..........

I like this... are you persistent though...???
leave me a few links of you next Open Mics
in the Omens tryout thread... and I'll get back to ya...
so far. I like what I see.
~Ashy~

iight sure man i'll go drop some stuff there