Power Outage-Talon
 

Keep ya mutha~fucking hands up, till you tear legiments
Keep this club packed, like southern hemisphere immigrants
Throw them fucking boes, till these hoes lose filaments
Praise and props ta me fa being so damn eloquent
Beat shook niggas, down fa being out of their element
Shake this fucking place like stampeding elephants
Malicious content, my vulgarity is flagrant
Stomp ya fucking feet till we fall in the basement
Burn the consitition, who gives a fuck what a statement (state meant)
Crank up ya fucking box till you need a replacement
Stay at all our shows till ya reported as a vagrant
Damn right!, expell all energy, burn off carbs, and fat
Nine milli's won't work?, than cop a larger gat
Bounce off the walls till you suffer power-outage
Push on the gas till you excell ya max mileage
Fuck peace, Talon just loves the crowd's violence,
Only when ya dead do I want ta hear silence
Jump up... stand up... look around and break shit
Rock shit... get drunk form a mutha~fucking mash pit
Make thugs call out God's mom, on some real pac shit
Lock shit, like pigeons twisting hair for a profit
Cop liks, toxic, poison brain cells, ill logic
Keep it pumping till ya drained, that's the fucking topic

Yo fam, that was an alright open mic. Your play on words was minimal and the flow is a little off. I wasn't really feeling it but you show alot of potential. You'll elevate definitely just keep dropping them open mics and use more wordplay, metas and multies and your flow will improve. Stay active fam. One+

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