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Beat --->(Eminem - Criminal) ((Guess where i got the topic???))

Serial killer iller then hannibal lector wit spikes fa teeth,
I'm a fuckin asshole maniac that likes ta beef,
I'm out on the kill every night when lightning sounds,
Fill ya head wit vivid images and frightning clowns,
Came outta Jail but i Never Fail So call me the CON-fidence,
I can turn u insane or make u one of me wit one-sentence,
Ima menace wit endless Weapons steppin and murderin hurbs,
Your words are in slurs and now your the third ta win Birds,
Give you some acid so it can teach u learn how ta fly,
Your entire Family and every house is burned, now ya die,
It must be the drugs that turn me to "CRACK-HEADS",
Witta metal pole i settle holds and faggets get Smacked-Dead,
Im packin-gory-fates, Im busy tonight, You rappin-for-me?GREAT,
This is basically what ya lackin-story-states,
You'll battle me n I get accused of that statutaury-rape,
Cause you get ripped and flipped over ta swim,
Dont bother me now i gotta fuckin poser ta skin,
This fuckin kid wacked out now and im sober as him,
Now it dont really matter what this fagget says,
Smash u wit a beer bottle n slice u wit the jagged edge,

I dunno just started listening to the beat and decided to add my own verse. Let me know what ya think.
[]Deace