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Funn DementaLL 10-27-03 06:46 AM

Is it me your looking for (story) peep...
 
I’ve been alone with you inside my head,
And in my dreams I’ve kissed your lips a thousand times
I sometimes see you pass outside my door
Hello, is it me you’re looking for

He slayed cupids with evil thoughts
Thoughts that could KNOCK FORTS
His distorted vocal cords means words from his brain can’t import
On lock down, exposed the knife that wrecked his life
After he brutally killed a woman he apparently liked
Neighbourhood stalker, with a death obsession
Burned corpses in compost heaps
Makes the soul freshen
Thrills in his mind from the victims depression
Then would jack himself off with the murder weapon
Loner, sneaked into hospital wards an rape women in coma’s
Stealing vital fluid in jars an pose as a blood donor
(Face of an angle) nature of an oga
(Mentally younger) physically older
poor guy, sleeps at night with his casualties in his dreams
getting revenge in the reconstructed themes
the dark scares him… It’s always Halloween
unaware of his sins he wonders why spirits are so mean
hard to live with the guilty content of his conscience
the torment in his head of the absent silence
sweating as a lethal substance makes an entrance
through his veins, the life-force vengeance
growing pains, of his presence
All in his LOST mind, he finds LOST souls
“Hello” they say “Is it me you’re looking for”

In-between life an deaths collision
He comes out of his head, an can’t believe his vision
(Haunted eternally) coz memories are living
(People span burglary) with the devils wisdom
changed his ways, saw the light, an took it when it was given
he dedicates himself to the church, not the prison
(scared to die) he asks god is he forgiven
(as time went by) all evil thoughts where forbidden
set sail the riddance his living version of hell
opened up his mind an shredded his outer shell
so now his sins are faded (faded)
but he’s heard in the underworld when he preaches
admired by ignorant locals who enjoy his gifted uniqueness

(But it didn’t last)

He looks up at the sky, an hates that it’s villilla
Demons ran back in his head, it was clear he’s a natural born killer
Reincarnated, adaptation of Hitler
Don’t get realer than reality but illusions are similar
He’s GOOD news in a BAD world
Discovered his new attraction to choir girls
No love in his heart, only in his head
To lure more victims to his room, this is what he says


“I’ve been alone with you inside my head,
And in my dreams I’ve kissed your lips a thousand times
I sometimes see you pass outside my door
Hello, is it me you’re looking for”

WORD~PERFECT 10-27-03 06:54 AM

to tell the truth i really liked it and your story was straight on topic relative and composed descriptive and well.

Funn DementaLL 10-27-03 07:02 AM

Respected, still lookin to collaberate wit u niggah!!!

Uppin for feed bk still!!!

Undeniable 10-27-03 09:30 AM

Thats good, you really get inside his head it flows well and the lyrics are smart.

Funn DementaLL 10-27-03 02:01 PM

WTF, I'm one of dem slept on cats... wha up fellow RB users...

Wake up on Funn

I'm always giving feed bk, favours never be returned...

Uppin!!!

rule 10-27-03 02:03 PM

long ass piece...but definitly a great read...you had good wordplay and great story line..i liked your first line about cupid that was dope...nice flow and shit nigs...keep it up peace...UPPEN ThiS

Funn DementaLL 10-27-03 02:36 PM

Thanx Rule, dunn know where to turn if you lookin to collaberate!!

Menik 10-27-03 02:42 PM

Yeah this was a good piece....long read, but it was worth it....it flowed rather well i thought....i liked the wordplay in this piece, it was real good....kept to the story line through out the piece...your vocab was nice and so was your structure....overall it was a good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.


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