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/:Ayura:\ 10-27-03 03:53 PM

.:Reflecting the light on my Calligraphy:.
 
I speak graffiti in the haunting, The ghost writer
The phantom painter, Poltergiest lone ink rider
Think higher, I grasp the paper mask and disguise
I attack the divine, Enclose the path to my rhymes
On the page, I enter the zone, my task to revive
To plaster the mind with the devils laughter inside
Sipping wine, As I mind read the invisible library
Writing in tranquality till the pen acts lively
My tounge tieing ability leave's mc's trapped in my calligraphy
The letter army alpha omega squadron letting off artillery
My art moves like TV, motion freelancing freely
Walking the ocean's till man can't see me
Emsulify novel's in liquid puzzles as my riddles
Muffles the middle of your brain, and make your head jiggle
The Phantom Painter will make ya skin tingle
Invisible lingua singer, battling on the auditory
Audio gory as I rap horror on my PJ's top storey

rule 10-27-03 05:23 PM

started off really strong i found you didnt really didnt finish it it cud be longer, but for this it was a good read good word usage and flow keep it up

D-Dizzle 10-27-03 06:00 PM

THis was pretty good, good vocab and methaphor usage, flow was on. Seem to turn into a high-end battle rhyme toward the end. And you started off so strong at the begining that the rest didn't add up. still a good drop though

Blaze 1 10-27-03 06:15 PM

i think your peice was aiight words i could feel and you stuck to your subject ill give it a 7 on the lyricall dose scale also you had like 5 punches

/:Ayura:\ 10-28-03 11:44 AM

k thanx

I kept it short, cus I wanted it to be high quality, and I was just messing about with creativity and shit. Imma use this actual concept in an audio

Edicius 10-28-03 11:48 AM

I think this sux

Nah..

U used a nice immagy man ...and some ok vocab..flowed well..but not on all points in my eyes..
Niceley exucuted, open mic, ..only i think it could have bein a little longer, but i cant find things to break down , only the fact than in my opinon the flow, wsnt always there, ..but the concept removed that bad thing' for me all and all a real nice read, ..
Specially like the intro

I speak graffiti in the haunting, The ghost writer
The phantom painter, Poltergiest lone ink rider


Was a good opener, ..i liked it...

Props

Pz

/:Ayura:\ 10-28-03 11:54 AM

thanx, still upping though

menolin 10-28-03 04:21 PM

this was a tight peice,
tighter than rod stewart wit his man purse(if ya not heard botu ti dont ask)

nice wordplay, paintin the picture in my mind

/:Ayura:\ 10-29-03 01:34 PM

lol k thanx bruv


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