Fictional Peace
 

This Is An Audio To Be... Look For The Audio In My Sig When I Complete It...

Confusing Questions, With No Answers Bein Mentioned
Peace Bein Deceased Reason For Stress And Tension
Keepin Our Children Guessin, Whats Right And Wrong
We're Simply Carressin, The Sin That Consumes Us All
Why Dont We Learn Our Lession Before We Are All Gone?
Why Do We Wait, Until It's Too Late And So Proned To Stall
Just Siezing Peace, Relieving Grief, But Realisticly
The Fact Is That, We Should Forget It, The Results Are Brief
Quests For Less Tests Of Hate Would Be Great Just To Get Blessed
Nevertheless We Stress, Our Community's Got People Puttin Holes In Innocent Chests... Government Swears Its Best... To Leave Em Alone... Dont Wanna Be Bothered...
I'd Love To Follow A Thug Home Just To Meet His Mother And Father
World Bein Cursed By Hatrid And Rage Bein Staged
Caged In Racism Lacing Together Hate And Fate
Descrimination And Hatrid Claiming Domination To Nations
Evil Indications, Fake Friendships Ending In Tragic Relations
Temptations To Procrastinate Will Decide Our Occupations
Patience And Hardword Results In Success Innovations
Too Many Lives Bein Taken, Too Many Hearts Are Racin
Tastin, Smellin, Hatrid Causin Body Chalk Tracins
Thinkin We Too Mature To Learn From This Horrid Type Lifestyle
I Dont Care How Old You Are, You're Still Just An Innocent Child
Mildly Understanding Reasons For This Type Of Piece
Honest Truth Spoken Of Real Yet Fictional Peace

this was deep, good thought provocing ideas
i like the line about following a hoodlum home...iv always wondered whats that like..
flow was nice, this would be nice in audio... no real flaws
good job kid

if you would be so kind, check the sig and choose one

Word To Your Mother ^.... :D

Uppin

that was raw, good work

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uppin for some feedback

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Hey little man
Im trying to find you
Where ya at

Nice drop, flow was there, vocabulary was there.
You seem to have a good knowledge of writing,
and though I didn't see anything outstanding
you seem to have done a nice job with writing
this piece. Nice display of everything in a good piece
Good job.

^ Thank You... All Feedback Much Appreciated

'Twas good, not much to critique, just a decent overall piece with solid structure

This was deep..

And it flowed well..some nice aspects used in it...

And i would like to hear the audio version ...

Nice drop...

^ Thank You... Yeah... I've Still Been Too Lazy For The Audio... lol

^Lmao..

drama piece
 

^that was my fav part of the piece, overall the vocab was good flowed alright, only thing i didnt like was the uppercase on every word.. that got kind of anoying. i feel ya on the audio i want to make all my open mics audio but dont have the equipment to, and when i go to get it someone usually calls me up and wants to party so im like screw it ill do it next friday. If you get the chance, plz drop some feedback on Rules of the Game (its in my sig) thx