SS: Swallowed Pride
 

Swallowed Pride....

I Came, I Saw, I Conquered, What I Thought I Had Known
I Thought I Had The Power Over My Evil Feelings, I'm Proned
To Feel At Times, When I Didn't Want To Think That Shit
My Pride Taking Over My Body, And Ruining My Existence
And Until I Knew My Other Half Would Finally Lose A Battle
I Had To Live With My Pride, Wait Until It Died, It Had To...

Foolishness, I'm On Top Of The World, As Far As I Can See
And There is Not Another Soul On This Planet, Defeating Me
Sure I May Cloud Your Judgement, But I'm Strong As It Is
You Swallowed Me In A Glass Jar, Like Blowjobs and Kids
But...You Are Unable To Understand, The Full Extent Of Power
I Pormised Happiness, But Pain And Suffer By Me Will Shower
And People Will Know Who I Am,History, Not A Face in The Books
Because My Power is Inevitable, When Its Done, The Earth Shooked

What I Don't Get, Is Why Your Here, As Much As I Regret
You Think You Lead Me To The Top, But We Are The Bottom Yet
You Think That You Have Taken Over, All of What My Body Controls
Like There Is No Use For Me, But I Am The Conscience, The Soul
You Are Just A Subdivision Of ME!! As Much As You don't want to Hear It
You Are Just An Unecessary Factor, And One I Can Easily Give My Riddings
You Are Nothing, Your Not a Power Of A Whole Extent Of Rage
Your Something Thats Created, And Animal Let Out its Cage
Because I Gave Birth To Pride, Another Feeling, Hard To Resist
But You Lost, Swallowed YourSelf, And Then Ceased To Exist.

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ill piece, tight imagery, tight rhyme scheme, good vocab, it flowed well, it was structured good, easy to read, it stayed on point, and all in all this piece was an enjoyable read.keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

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Re: SS: Swallowed Pride
 

damn nigga skrait piece fuh realz dun ill flow vocab nice emotions pretty good imaginary persective wus decent juss overall bomb ass drop nigga stay ^

^who you callin Nigga?
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Hot

Dope immagery

Nice vocab and flow, ...stayed good on topic, ...

Nice read

I love that shit Ill imagery and vocab
All n All this shit was tite

Strengths: You had a really good soild flow.
You alos had deep deep meaning.
Another note on flow-HOT!

Weaknesses: More unique Topic

Advice: Just keep doing what your doing, get a very unique topic next time, but overal it was really good.

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