Aa quick freestyle(word play)
 

YO I AINT FROM "MEMPHIS" BUT THE FLOW IS "GRIZZLY"//
IM LIKE A SHOVLE AN DIRT YOUR GIRL JUST DIGS ME//
I AINT GANGSTA BUT FUCK AROUND AN CATCH THREE AROUND YOUR SKULL LIKE A IVERSON HEAD BAND//
FUCK BATMAN AND ROBIN IM "ROBIN" WITH A "BAT" MAN//
I'LL NUT ON YOUR FOOD JUST SO I CAN SAY YOU FEED MY KIDS//
YOUR LIFES AN AUCTION DOG YOUR LUCKY I DONT PULL IT AN PUT IN MY BID//
WHEN I PULL THE CHAIN SON THE BOATS GET FRANTIC//
CAUSE MY ICE THE SIZE SON THAT SUNK THE TITANIC//
YOUR LIKE A PAIR OF SNEAKERS YOUR JUST FACEIN DA "FEET"//
I'LL THROW YOU OFF A BUILDING SO YOU CAN SAY YOU MET THE STREET//- 10


GIVE ME SOME FEED BACK ON THIS PIECE, THX.
PEACE

yeah the best thing about this is the word play, even though it was short you lost the flow a couple of times, maybe cos of the structure, i think it suited the length ant more and i would have probably been bored, aight..overall pretty average....peace!

can you hit this plz..........
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=88249

thx for the feed back nigga, and i'll deff. chek ur shit out.

that was a nice drop, funny as fuck in places





all nice, but ur spellin need a lil work,
e.g SHOVLE
shovel,
it cool to misspell certain words,



dont write in caps,
an dont usually hav more that one



nice dop though, i was jus pickin out the bad bits

pretty short but it was aight