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/:Ayura:\ 10-29-03 03:50 PM

.:Mind:.
 
Eyo

On the lone road I inhale magic in my Prone Throat
And watch Demons Dance in the mist of my Blown Smoke
Leaping Freelance Form taking Airbourne, Imma Flown Joke
Its funny, how I close my Eye's but my Mind Travels
And Rides Camels past the line of Sub Real Animals
A place full of ocean walls, A place of open torque
Where my creative motive force can storm emotion's mourn
I place where I feel warmth, And stride from this world's Icicles
You guy's stress with money, But I joice with my minds jewels
Life's full of too much questions
I touch the pen, my weapon for surviving this earths desert
Every letter I draw, Im mind stepping above the peasents
Im en-riched, submerged deep within the leafs liquid
Growing in photosynthesis, manipulating my deep twisted
Double Helix like complexion, I Sit in white room's, I sip whiskey
To me, theres more Thought in there then Einstien's Theory
Of relativity, that must mean my mind can lift
Mountains, like smoke Out from my Mouth of my Spliff
I Drift in my Mist, Hoping to find a key to Lock this Pain
Riding the Unicorn Across the Terrain Lost in the Plains
Of Thought and Expression, Im torn from the Weapons
Of there Mass Destruction, My Raps Summon Messages
The Gods offered me the gift of the Creative Dome
I refused in his offer, I wished to Elevate on my Own
Mystic Wizards Levitate between the Zone of my Ears
As I cast fear out onto walls, I fall and sit here
And glance upon my Rhythmic Side, Sipping Liquor
I Recite the Invisible Lines, And help myself to Dinner
Need energy to read all the books in my Invisible Library
To add Another page to my Mythical Mind Scenes

*Y_nOt* 10-29-03 03:52 PM

Damn, this shit was hot son. Shit was all on point, nice drop and keep it up, 1

rule 10-29-03 03:52 PM

amazing....your wordplay was ill, vocab and your sequance of usage of thoughts was to a maximum effort..very hot piece...great flow...very inteligant drop..peace man

/:Ayura:\ 10-29-03 03:54 PM

thanx, I did feel I had elevated on when writing this.

upping though

Hallow-Tipz-527 10-29-03 04:47 PM

damn homie,
that kills everything ive ever written.
your word play and flow was all on point and tight like a noose.
you helpin me out is gunna be fresh as hell now that ive seen this drop. much props man...much props.

frozen with heat 10-29-03 04:51 PM

yo, again this was another amazing drop everything about it was on point.
immagery
On the lone road I inhale magic in my Prone Throat
And watch Demons Dance in the mist of my Blown Smoke


nice internals
Its funny, how I close my Eye's but my Mind Travels
And Rides Camels past the line of Sub Real Animals


nice multis
I touch the pen, my weapon for surviving this earths desert
Every letter I draw, Im mind stepping above the peasents


theres just too many quoteables in this piece, it alll ill, nice topic, nice immagery, nice flow, nice vocab.

this was probs one fo the best pieces i senn in open mic for a long time.

/:Ayura:\ 10-29-03 04:55 PM

k, thanx guys. I think this was wanna da best pieces I'v written yet up to date.

Slik 10-29-03 05:04 PM

^^ No lie...

wow nice work here...
You flow was on point along with all your vocab. You had a nice topic too, made me really think about it. MOst of theshit i read is the same ol thing. But yeah, this was very original. Nice job with the imagery too. Thats what most people have trouble with, but you handled it well. Madd props to you.
Overall- 9/10

/:Ayura:\ 10-29-03 05:11 PM

lol thanx bruv

Blaze 1 10-29-03 05:21 PM

illmatic cuz i had to get on cloud nine after that read to see if i can see the same shit great lyricall dose-"ONE"

/:Ayura:\ 10-30-03 10:59 AM

thanx, still uppin dis though

/:Ayura:\ 11-01-03 07:14 PM

up

LM 11-02-03 04:47 AM

This was amazin....everythin about it. The flow, vocab, creativity....everythin. One of the best I've read here. Either the words came naturally to you or your head exploded tryin to think of shit like that coz It was hot. Amazin work. 9/10

I still cant reply to your Pm coz your inbox is full....it's about a collab

Spitzophrenik 11-02-03 07:23 AM

This Shit Was Hot Man,I'd Like To See Morr Like This.. Stayed On Topic n Had Some Dope Lines.. 1

Split-eyez 11-02-03 08:51 AM

fuck man
amazing piece
just wow
everything was on point
vocab, flowz, creativity... just wow man
keep droppin, ya piece is dope as fuck

resp


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