When I wake from this dream
 

(Verse 1)
It's all good a nigga from a small hood
made it trying to show that we all could
got a couple of cars and a house behind small woods
no longer have to bang he do what we all should
thats workin, jump in the studio straight merkin
these beats straight heat when he spits rhymes be spurtin
no more violence and stealin while the po-pos be lurkin
it's great I never thought i could ever be this
livin a straight life with a family, it's bliss
thing can be resolved without bringin out the heat
my rep is no long juggled and judged on the street
no more war scars or missin teeth
no more wonderin when will i'll be going underneath
and if i will make it pass this year and see my seventeenth

(Chorus)
Everynight i wish i could never wake
Knowing that I'll always have my life at stake
Livin a young thugs life day by day and scheme by scheme
Is what i will return to when i wake from this dream

(Verse 2)
Cars, The lights
Gangs, The fights
Fearing to hear the police siren at night
Fades away whenever i sleep at night
I go off into a wonderland
Where I have no fear of going under man
Never again have to see the blood spudder man
I live in a world of no rainy days always summer in the makin
only pigs around is the ones for bacon
not the kinda pigs crooks have to be shakin
Only chalk drawings is for teachers to make a statement
but when I wake it's back to the streets again
it's back to run or get beat again
Pulling a lick so i can maybe have money to spend
I have nothing to gain and alot to lose
Never lick my wounds cause this is the life I choose
but I still got fantasies to fall back on when I snooze

(Chorus)
Everynight i wish i could never wake
Knowing that I'll always have my life at stake
Livin a young thugs life day by day and scheme by scheme
Is what i will return to when i wake from this dream

COme on peeps i need feedback tell me what you think

yo shit cuz, dat tight... could be lil betta vocab and shit... but the scheem like sumtin paz would do. dawg u got skills, like fo real

yeah man this shit is pretty good.............................................. ......................

yeah thought this was ok, the first verse was stronger than the second, but it wasn't bad, it just seemed a bit choppy, but i didn't like the hook.........all in all not bad........

can you hit this plz..........
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=88249

that was damn good..... sounds pretty real too.. liked it

uppin for some feedback

Uppin for feedback

ok, flow was ok, it was a lil choppy in parts though...vocab was kinda simple and could use some upping...content was ok, but nothing really caught my eye...hook was ok...1st verse was better than the second...overall it was ok...keep dropping though...

if you get a chance...check out my latest open mic and leave me some feedback...
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