Can U Understand?
 

am i eating/
or feeding my flesh/
listening to the wrong voices/
had me cheating my death/
had me loosing my breath/
visions of bullets hitting me/
had two in my chest/
but i survived/
im a warrior with 6 million ways to rise/
and i know that im living to die/
but aint no grave for me/
giving to the whiteman/
or im a slave for the streets/
innocent man/
but they keep on blaming me/
catching whatever they aim at me/
caged in animal/
aint no taming me/

get at me let me know if u feeling me-"ONE"

this is more of a poem with a lil bit of emotion umm needs vocab needs metas an multis but fore expression werd up nigga it wus skrait

Hot. But wordplay could be stepped up a little still pretty hot. good look on the vote

HOLLA AT DA KID

ill piece, good structure, good vocab, stayed on point, flowed well, it was a little short and choppy but other than that this piece was pretty ill, nice topic and what not,keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

i think you should have a little more detail in the lyrics

i thought this was pretty good, far too short though, and i would start writin in proper lines, so it reads easier, but you had a good flow goin.......peace

can you hit this plz.......
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=88249