16 Line Verse...(peep and critic)
 

one last ride thru this side...come wit me
lets take a ride thru this side (again)
lets take a ride thru this side (again wit me)

the most hated or the most loved...the most debated and unplugged //
thats me, the wildest of sides, the light of the eye, cant hide me //
passed many whiles with the wild...got my own style //
many papers full of words that came within in //
only death can erace what i could hav been //
at a young age...writin wit rage...i wuz my own slave //
trapped in my mind...to opposin sides...a killer and the other was nice //
only the baddest can come out of this creation //
no patience...ima muthafuckin threat to this nation //
words tied together in a knot...the cause of damage and i cant stop //
iam still standing, and the world is just too demanding //
my fall is close, i see it in every vision //
though my try's couldent complete the attempted missions //
i spread the message...may god bless this //
i will live in the soul's of those who had doubts //
my own life shows the earth is a load and u'll always die tryin' below the ground //

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yo cuz those are some deep words man i kinda related to what u was talkin about in there.i kinda vibed with it.anyways yo keep up the good work man.i really like the part where u was like at a yung age writin with rage i was my own slave,that shit right there hit me dead on dawg,nice use of words yo,im out.

thanx homeboi...mor feedback

this was a pretty tight piece u had some really good flow in it..........you also had some nice vocab and a good rhyme scheme.....good drop cuz...................