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Da NFamous 11-02-03 08:58 PM

1,2,and 3
 
1=Past 2=Present 3=Future

*3 Men stand at three podiums in a debate with each other projecting their views on a 4th man. the 3 are Past Present and Future with the Fourth immune to time reviewing only the facts stated by the trio....listen in*

1:In our past meeting death was the topic at hand~
2:Well lets continue to debate its's worth~
1:But it is a thing of the past i cannot bring myself to understand~
3:The plan of the evident is to compromise life with demise on this Earth~
4:The question today will be what is life?~
1:History repeats so the answer lies in my reply~
2:The question is more simply put what will man do right, right?
3:The truth will forever lie lost until i pause to the present i sigh
4:No lie? 1:Nonsense Presnt's presence contradicts this~
4:Truth? 2:my present to you is the now~
3:Ignorance plagues all three of you, wut a sickness~
4:Question closed i know present you with a how~
1:A how? 2: A How? 3:Your question seems suitable~
4:Yes i forgot..3:Forgotten is the past continue politics as usual~
4:Cease being rude you two can you not coexist this for fun?~
1:Coexistance is this the one so the present i present you our son~
4:Lord have mercy1/2:Yes indeed! 3:A lie, you all are soft and scared~
3:Walk with me my friend and allow me to lighten the load of the cross you bear~
1:His light burns of a pain 2:My friend live free of sorrow~
4:The future's case is accepted again, i pray you two succeed tomorrow~
3They will but their victory will lay in my palms~
4:The future surely seeks the truth because his answers do not stay in Psalms~
2:This is unclear sir! 4:Dismissed i say retreat to your respective breath~
*3 to self* May all of you dwell upon lies as i return to death~

*The future lowers a hooded cloak and lies down a scyth and an hourglass*
3:Soon all will be understood...

Bleh just playing around, 1luv.

.:LadySage:. 11-02-03 10:10 PM

interesting attempt
the meaning's kinda hard to comprehend
confisuing b/c of the conversation format and it being 4 people and all
i didnt really get into it and recieve the full affect just b/c of that

.......thats all
i guess

varentao 11-03-03 07:35 PM

Quite extraordinary. Cos i remember a couple years ago i did something exactly like this (the concept that is, though from my broken memory the direction was different). I wrote for ages around 6 pages.

So this made me strangley and obscurely nostalgic.

Very original. Tackling philosophical issues in a quite epic yet grounded way. Well maybe if it'd been longer and/or more 'crafted' it'd been epic epic (yes i know i used it twice!).

But it did seem you sketched it rather than drew it. Which i think you kind of hinted at the end with the 'just playing around'. Though of course you 'sketching' it as such didn't effect it in a bad way. Rather in a good way. Showing your ability to put quite profound things down in a relatively quick and 'untouched' way.

Very good for what it was in my opinion. I enjoyed reading it.

...resp...

Da NFamous 11-04-03 09:52 PM

^Too appreciative of the reply man, elevation is key, 1luv.


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