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Two Rights Make a Wrong
Victim #1
A retired individual revelling in his golden days A solitary man settling into comforts phase Harmless age former postal worker slash Messenger Silver innocence crowned this heads aggresor So as he strolled with mans best friend I followed Within woods camouflage I performed a hollow Grabbed him with leather fingers of righteous I looked beyond his scared sight into a sector for lifeless Tree branches lowered in silence to secret my deed The dogs dyslexic wagging tail agreeing my planned soul relief Not guilty!Sacrificial trade Golden days ended by a jugular silver blade Victim #2 A single whoreish mother struggling to cope with forged troubles For every child conceived her waterfall eyes doubled Now bereft of lovers she squalored in a cess pit of stench The ramshackled abode absorbed her strength born by rent A thatched pale face attached to a skinny frail frame So as she sat in suns porch I shortened the terrain Now I laid claim dragging her flailing torso in doors I looked beyond her blank stare into young lifeless thoughts Muffled her with a glove and twisted a vengeance edge Erased her soul while that old dog wagged with her death The shacks walls whispered a promise to remain silent Windows and doors shut to contain the violence Not Guilty!Sacrificial trade encaved by a rusty roofs omen of blade Victim #3 A youngster raised in a home battered by dads rage There was no escape so he dwelt on hates smiling façade Turned 18 and evicted himself from his only family A humble street bum so sad to see but he had the audacity to leave Now resident to a rat ridden alley way society prison Scarcly covered in rags his shivering self struggled for livin His eyes closed I approached the dirty bricked slumber Unrestrained his lids flickered with colds discomfort I looked beyond the tired eyes into a family of sins Behind rusted bins I slipped a sliver of steel within But I saw no wagging dog his tail was lowered and still He trotted away from view whining with guilt Guilty?Sacrificial trade dithered on fate and was torn by haste After all is it so bad to end a child abusers presence? After all is so bad to end a child murdering parent? But then again…mistakes do happen u learn from a lesson Guilt edged the boys death who killed his violent fathers temper who beat him since he can remember….. |
DAMN ...KID NICE SHIT U THREW....
GREAT VOCAB... GOOD FLOW... GOOD TOPIC... LIL DIFFERENT .... I LIK'D THE 1ST AND 2ND VERSES KEEP THAT SHIT GOOD... (if ya get time hit mine) thanx GOOD SHIT KID OVERALL I LIKE'D IT |
WOW..
damn... i like your flow and how you took on some heavy subjects defintly some good shit |
any other replies other than 'some dope shit!'?
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Raw drop...
Wordplay and flow hit real good... Victims lives explained real vivid... Victim 2 seemed to be my favorite... 9/10... Keep em coming... |
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