Don't be scared
 

Don't be scared my angel for thou shall not lose you again. I caused so much pain and till that pain hit my heart i knew i was in love with you. I would never risk loosing your love again. I will never hurt you. As tough and bad ass as i may seem you know deep inside that i'm your teddy and could never do anything to hurt you. Just everything to make you happy. You have seen what I can do when I loose my temper but with you i'm a gentle giant. I know what both of have went through, and i've been here even when I was hated. And you know why?... Because I love you. Don't be scared hunny, I am here for you always. I love you and I would never hurt you. Don't be scared....

aw this was sweet
you can really feel the emotion here
when it comes to pieces that express truth and how a person feel
the technical aspects dont matter to me
poetry is truth from the heart
real sincere here
keep elevatin

Good drop. Structure was ok but the meaning was heartfelt. Seems like there is a lot of love put into this and whoever ur writing this to is probably very happy. You make it seem as if she is unstable, but you ensure her that you will not make your mistakes again. Its like even though you can be the toughest person, when it comes to her, youre soft. Sorry to put it like that, seeing ur a guy. Overall, great job. Keep droppin. Most respect.

good piece. ok structure. message was heartfelt and morned. keep droppin jt.

MM

it seems like more of a love letter but still was a decent read....
you had a lot of feelilng put into it but not enough imagery....
we understand that you love her but you should put more
reasons like " with you i'm as gentile as a giant" so that we can
really see actions....actions always speak louder than words,
structure was good but it kinda got a little messy b/c you had it
all in one paragraph. Keep Writing.

this was a piece full of pure emotion, and was meant to get those feelings of love out. it was a great read. it was a piece that made you happy reading it, and made me think of all the ppl i love and of the ones that love me back. its a confindent piece, you can tell that from the first line, so it makes you seem so strong, but i feel that inside your just holding on, and if things didnt work that it would all slip, but lets all hope it doesnt!!!! i liked the way you ended this. all and all it was very warming and a great read!!!

~Tera~
DONT HATE

Seemed like a letter, well more of a quick heartfelt note really. But it was cute in it's own manner. Something like this hits you with it's originality.... There's really not a whole lot one can say to this, though I do tend to be a fan of old english being used by modern writers in a comprehenable way... felt like it started out as a poem and then turned in to an emotional flood. Which was effective, good idea, decent drop... SWEET MESSAGE! lol peace bud