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Accelerate 11-04-03 04:47 PM

Burned Passion
 
Maybe It's love, maybe it's the feeling in us all
Maybe it's the physical appearance,that I saw
Or maybe It's because I respect you as my girl
Because if Life's a Bitch,then Your Out this World

Please...Listen Closely, my Devotion is Coming from the heart
I have a million things to say,but I don't know where to start
I would put my current life away, to become a changed man
See the power you have over me, But now I truly understand

I would carry you over puddles, so that you don't touch dirty ground
I would think Your used to it, But no man's done it for you until now
I try to watch myself, because You don't deserve my bad ways or attitudes
And I want you to feel good, Your like my sun, My world revolves around you
I would take you where you wanted, treat you Like a queen,Sky's the Limit
I would take You out into the stars, If I really could, but that beauty is unfinished
How did you ever become so perfect and yet so humanly packaged in perfection
No surprise of how everybody want to be like you, yet your identical:reflection

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Like I said before, You are human

Personality kicks in, yet I thought your physical frame was enough
Your beauty completed your outside, but you showed me my luck

I thought I saw perfection, But then You seemed a different person
I thought I met the perfect girl, On the Outside,Inside You were still rehearsin
Then we got into that fight, Hell was appearing on heavenly surface
A different person, I don't recognize you anymore, anger just began resurgance

I couldn't control my anger, my reactions, myself all in general anymore
I thought I loved You, But Like Cowardly Fathers, it all went out the door.


"Our brains weren't used to control women, Our feet weren't used to trample on them, But our ribs were used for them to walk beside us, our part from under our arms to protect them, and our heart to love them"

not sure if that was the exact quote, or who said it, but yeah it's there.
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Accelerate 11-05-03 04:42 PM

^

WORD~PERFECT 11-05-03 04:49 PM

Because if Life's a Bitch,then Your Out this World
THAT LINE MADE LITTLE SENCE...
THOUGH VERY BASIC THIS WAS STRONMG MEANINGFUL AND BEAUTIFUL IN COMPOSITION .
I would put my current life away, to become a changed man
See the power you have over me, But now I truly understand
THATS TRUE LOVE!!!!!!!!!1
SON THERE ARE TO MANY QOUTABLE LINES AND THIS WAS JUST TO REAL FOR ME KNOWING AND RELATING THESE EMOTIONS LIKE MINE FOR MY EX WIFE(GOD REST HER SOUL)
VERY GOOD POP HIT ME UP FOR A COLLAB

Accelerate 11-05-03 04:54 PM

I'll try to hit you up when I finish my SS verse. Good Looks on the comments WP

Ken Dawg 11-09-03 12:11 AM

Yeah those words were kinda powerful and quite meaningless in my life..Rhyme was was so decent..

rule 11-09-03 10:33 AM

wow, deep. But great read, your first half of this was incredible. Flow was great. This was a great piece, cuz relate to it. I found that made it shine. keep it up..pz

Handcuffs 11-09-03 10:43 AM

lost it a little is some parts, but overall.......................dope piece playa

NewPort 11-09-03 12:08 PM

Wow.. This Was Dope.. Really Liked It.
Nice Work. The Depth Was Consistent.
And The Structure Along With Flow n Rhyme
Scheme Was Great. Dope Piece.. Got Into
It.. Very Enjoyable To Read..

Consider Trying Out For ClaustrophobicS..
We Could Use A Dope Head LIke You

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