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pot1ent 11-04-03 05:15 PM

[Just A Joke]
 
Everyones star struck aslong as they live on this planet
I'll admit Potents the worst when it comes to bad habits
I spit so freely with force you'd think i'm a gypso squad
The majority of us can invent life therefore we're all god
Am I odd or at my prime?Look at my age then youd find
No I Am Not,Your like prepared drunks your plans shots
Another mans dropped due to puberty, killing all the men
Why is it only deep sea divers thats filling up with bends
I must treasure the time I spend cuz soon it'll be crossed
Better Be-little again!? so that my treasure won’t be lost
Dudes get cross cuz pot always plays with their hot buns
Well it does give them cancer scares there if they do that
People ain't recognizing this like why do they sew'are rats
Undo my raps at chrstmas cuz its all bad luck at that date
The crackers are always pulled & there nothing but slates
So how do I make something elevate?

Fuck how would I know!?. .I'm just a joke

NewPort 11-04-03 05:19 PM

lol.. wow
thats it

good diss.. (on ureself)\

:)

pot1ent 11-04-03 05:30 PM

It was really just cracking jokes at all aspects including myself. .lol. .But yeah. .UP

Baron God 11-04-03 05:36 PM

It wasnt that good, actually. I was dissapointed with this, you seemed to of slacked off, a lot of the inetrnals and multi's were missing from this piece, it didnt seem like you put much effort in, flow was decent as i read it, last line roiunded it off nicely, but at the beginning this was awful.
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Another mans dropped due to puberty, killing all the men
Why is it only deep sea divers thats filling up with bends

^ It seemed to pick up from there on, you should of kept it like that throughout the verse, but the opening six or so lines didnt really interest me or draw me into the topic and from there on it was too short to really develop further.

Sorry bro. Just an honest opinion. = /

pot1ent 11-04-03 05:40 PM

Honest opions are appreciated = )


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